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Haijin.

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Haijin--
holds in ink
the moment




Andrew Hide
13~02~2004

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Written February 13th, 2004

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  • Peteskid gold member
    July 11
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    so true...this could be a teacher's tool...very nice...PK


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    August 4, 2005
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    A favourite of mine from you!

    Wow! What a beautifully captured moment this is. I think this is a favourite with me Just goes to show that in only as little as 8 syllables, a masterpiece can be created and penned down for the world to admire. This really really resonates. So many moments this reveals...a marvel indeed!



    Charishma


  • Ava Noire silver member
    June 21, 2004
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    Ah. Another wowser Andrew.

    Capturing moments beheld in ink so that generations may behold them as well.


  • glazecovered
    March 22, 2004
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    Wow. Everyone who starts writing haikus should definitely take a look at this one. This is a perfect example of saying so much in just a few words. This is an excellent work, great job!
    ~Anastasia

  • mina nagi
    March 10, 2004
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    Why to write long poems when vast can be expressed in a few lines... it's an excellent Haiku... thanx for sharing...
    mina


  • WildFireBird
    March 10, 2004
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    Beautiful

    How many moments are so held?


  • Emmerson
    February 15, 2004
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    You are definately a man of few words...your Haikus never cease to amaze me A) because I just can't do them & because they are always terrific. Someone once said to me a poet is someone who can paint a picture with a minimal amount of words & you Mr Hide are definately a master

  • skinwalker 2
    February 13, 2004
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    Great pic

    Excellent for the eyes to see when the mind comprehends >>

    Written in the sand
    Desert winds sing of legend
    Harmony is one

    Great Job ~ Skinwalker
    Edited on Feb 14 because 'ops ???'.

  • Billbard silver member
    February 13, 2004
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    Excellent picture picture,excellent word picture in so few words

    Todays Hatku-ers
    Capture the moments too
    In methods newer.

    Well done.Bill

  • Pari Ali
    February 13, 2004
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    brilliantly put


  • Kitesen
    February 13, 2004
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    Right that simplicity as inkdrawings often offer. So is that look of this poem. But given the time to work out in mind it show the perception what is needed to create these views.


  • SusanL
    February 13, 2004
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    the picture says it all. precice use of words my friend. the art portraying the artist. Susan


  • macandrew
    February 13, 2004
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    very good

    Took a while to find the definition of haijin. This one spurred me on to try anohter.

    Well written.
    thanks,
    John

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