A kiss on the cheek as I turn away.
But it's as empty as the pain reliever
sitting on my bedside
[and you and I both know]
that giving your all isn't good enough
when it comes to chasing dreams.
[I'm chasing dreams]
and fireflies when my mind nails down
plot
[set scene; final act]
when you lean over and kiss me
like I'm Juliet and realize a second
too late that you're Paris.
["Paris Falls"]
Paris fails.
It's all I can do to
breathe
as the story unfolds and you can
see in me all that I can't be.
And though I'm crying,
the dream begins
[when will it end?]
and he steps from the ocean
like a wave crashing in.
And before I can reach him;
another over laps him and
erases his fingerprints from the
delicate sand.
[and I ask you quietly if you]
Remember the water tower where
we used to sit and
whisper our secrets to the
w o r l d ?
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Comments
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I really like this one, the ending is really good. thanks for sharing
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A rich piece, though slightly arcane, it is chock full of vibrant and sharpe images...well done piece of work here! bravo!!!
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This was wonderfully done. I didn't think it as sad as it was meant to seem though. It was well written and the word choice was pleasantly done, so I thought it was awesome. Great job and good luck in my contest.
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wow great
This is great, like it great job, well fobe
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This actually made me cry. it's so sad.
Remember the water tower where
we used to sit and
whisper our secrets to the
w o r l d ?
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Oh wow. This may have been the best piece I've read in awhile. It was ... poignant. You really managed to hit on what I was feeling. Thank you.
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