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I'll Be Your Waterfall

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As the water plummets from the rocks above
washing away the loneliness,
making our own rainbow
from the ray of light we make as one.



Helping each other treadwater across
that ocean till we reach shore,
stepping on the sand of a new beginning
leaving the tribulation behind.



Having you touch my garden of eden,
planting your seed
as I water it with my
my own honeyed flux nectar.



Immersing in our own cascade
letting go of the euphoria
that once was, to  embracing
the passion of what is now.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

I do not claim the pictures used with this write as my own. Pictures found on flickr.com

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  • MarkReeves
    February 4, 2009
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    Very lovely

    Very lovely poem and good imagination and form.
    Good luck in the contest


  • AnaelCathetelEcanus silver member
    January 26, 2009

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    Extremely powerful words. After reading your last HOT one, hehe. I can see the visuals within your words relating in a sense. Fabulous read!


  • luna-midnight silver member
    January 24, 2009

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    haha. wow...nicely described. waterfalls are very beautiful things. thanks for entering and good luck
    Stephanie ♥


  • bloodytears20
    January 18, 2009
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    This is a great Piece. You should publish some of these


  • Swtpoetryman
    January 14, 2009

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    I FINE PIECE, BABY - FROM A FINE LADY!

    I thought I'd stop by to see what you have been up to as i had a little time to read one or two before having breakfast for my evening meal - and laying in bed to read a magazine or two. I look forward to reading more of your work both naughty and nice - as time goes by.
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.


  • sensualbutterfly
    January 9, 2009

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    Beautiful use of metaphores. Steamy and hot, though quite different from your other writes. I still love it

  • New-n-Improved
    January 8, 2009

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    Very Good

    I really like this one. You are so amazing and I just love to read your poems. They really get my day going. My niggaz say I'm gay for being into poetry but they don't understand what it does for the soul. You have the power to quench my soul with your words and I can't get enough of it. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.


  • thejollytinker
    January 7, 2009

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    Don't know your voice quite yet, but this is special. You must have a heart as big as a church bell!
    I'd like you to be a favorite, too- and I wish you the best of luck in school. I graduated college at 40 years of age- that means anyone can do it!
    Don't want to fill up your guest book, but I've gotta send you a picture of Justine, if you don't mind- my little water-nymph who holds my heart and my candy, whenever she wants it!
    Do stay in touch. Gresham


  • darell
    January 7, 2009

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    Nice

    boy do you have alot of devoted fans.
    I think its well deserved.
    This was beautiful and sexy


  • AddictiveTRUTH
    January 7, 2009

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    The indepthness of your words

    are very captivating. I loved this piece. Good luck and take care.
    Gr8t to be back and catch up on some of my favorites

    -ephiphany


  • Glasyalabolas
    January 7, 2009

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    Very beautiful wording and imagery that it provides. Exceptionally sensual.

    Good write.


  • smonte19124 gold member
    January 7, 2009

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    Beauty unfolds and the subtle sensuality expressed words are sublime. The imagery reaches down deep and captures you and holds you enthralled. A wonderful, wonderful experience in the reading of your words complimented even more when you add the picture.. Thank you and good luck in the contest. Another award to add to your collection. God Bless, Jo-Ann


  • Keith M Drew gold member
    January 7, 2009

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    The force of the waterfall, impossible to stop ones self from the power it rushes within its passion!
    Its crescendo reaching a peak trying to suck you in, and make you as one with nature.No man nor woman can fight this force! Until it has done with them.


    So I think I must find a place more fitting, a place where she will be waiting for me.
    A place that she herself would choose.
    Where there is only light and beauty, and wonder. Where lovers over the centuries have betrothed themselves to one another.
    A place of love and wishes granted.
    Where I will make that wish within the deepest pool, and see the diamonds within her eyes light up within the cascade of a teared falls.
    Only there in that place will she be with me.
    Only there will I feel her love.
    Only there will my heart at last be with hers.


  • Maxboy gold member
    January 7, 2009

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    Very good girl, that should get more than the plants and rocks wet, very good imagery.

    Well Done....Best wishes in the contest


  • Desire gold member
    January 6, 2009

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    Woot~

    Oh My Word~ Excellent visuals penned Beautiful and energy exudes through the screen
    Wonderful weaving of words~ Sweeeet
    Bravo!!
    Border a Beauty too
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • doolie gold member
    January 6, 2009

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    What a beautiful and sensual write. Love your picture. Good luck hun in the contest.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 6, 2009
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    mmmm..

    what a tasty sensual delight! wow, yeah this is wet and steamy..the pic. is beautiful too!

  • mz.butter
    January 6, 2009
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    all i can think about is making love and creating new life ,very sensual.


  • theredcatjazzoflove
    January 6, 2009

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    good luck in the contest honey i cant put my finger on this one not a bad thing i just cant


  • penman gold member
    January 6, 2009

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    Beautiful

    Oh my this is so touching and very sensuous. The images are truly wonderful. Best of luck in the contest.

  • mcfreeman
    January 6, 2009
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    Watery...delights


  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    January 6, 2009

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    Beautiful imagery and a lovely background
    to go with it dear! Well done and good luck
    with sensual and passionate write!



    "Having you touch my garden of eden,
    planting your seed
    as I water it with my
    my own honeyed flux nectar.

    Immersing in our own cascade
    letting go of the euphoria
    that once was, to embracing
    the passion of what is now."




    Jeremy0826

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