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Pharaoh's Gift

 

A desert blooms in Pharaohs' tombs
while the air blisters in roman news
and nod do I to the mighty sun
Ra has risen to him I pray
when I grow I will see the day
dressed in white on alter’s light
Ba on Barque with him in night
The eye of Horus comes too soon
on pallet my dreams laid to swoon
Oh mighty Pharaoh of this land
willed if you would touch this hand
but I like others sequestered now
await our destiny by golden cow
priestess guides my thoughts today
blessings poured in words, I stray
be that my heart remain so strong
for weeping makes the nights too long
I know not of what others do
for in this temple we are but few
turn by turn all bright embers fly
in reverence Osiris I live but to die
May the Gods rest in our last deep sigh

 

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  • Draig aine gold member
    January 28
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    congratulations on the green thingy

    but I liked yours better then mine!!!


  • Bosiarbooger gold member
    January 27

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    Very well done

    A wonderful entry very fitting A thrill for me to read on my birthday, thank you for entering and best of luck to you


  • thepoetssoul
    January 8

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    Wow this is packed full of egyptian mystery.
    The imagery and rhyme is well written.
    Splendidly done indeed.
    Best of wishes to you and all you do.

    Tony

  • Love it, Sun...

    Strong narrative, showing a keen knowledge & enthusiasm of Egyptology...
    Loved the rhyme scheme, it gave an almost prayer like quality to the piece...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Borglesnarf
    January 7

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    Interesting

    about half way through I was just fed up with the rhyme scheme, it was irritating me... and then it climaxed and was really beautiful and powerful.
    reminds me of a song called "Demented Angels"


  • badnovocaine
    January 7

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    Oh my, loved this!
    This poem was astounding.

    Oh mighty Pharaoh of this land
    willed if you would touch this hand
    but I like others sequestered now
    await our destiny by golden cow
    -----------
    Good luck in the contest, you deserve it.


  • Draig aine gold member
    January 7
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    ah my friend

    your soul shines through bravo


  • lunarlunacy
    January 6
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    well crafted G

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