There was a day
When I moved away
I went to school
And came home feeling like a fool
So I ran upstairs
Thinking about those affairs
I grab the knife
Thinking about ending my life
But instead I just slice
It makes me feel as cold as ice
It doesn't hurt I tell myself
And I put the knife back on the shelf
I can't stop cutting now
And that I just can't allow
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Amazing
I know how you feel, I really do, stopping is virtually impossible.
If you ever need someone, I'm here.
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i love even though im only 16 i have to say cutting does make everything better but not ending lifes.
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I really liked this piece...now i've never been a cutter but there have been other things in my life just as scarey and deadly that i couldn't stop doing and didn't want to do anymore...i got help for mine...i hope one day you can too...i can see your emotion in this piece...i think it could have been a bit rawer but overall i like it...two thumbs up!!!...keep on writing it's good for you!!!
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You can't stop, and can't allow it to continue...that is the tension in our choice of behaviors when emotional pressure is overpowering, seems like you are lost. Nice write.
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Wow.
its kinda off beat, but it is so beautiful.
i'm really sorry your feeling this way and your only 13. wow.
i was exactly like you at that age.
your poetry is beautiful, you have a wonderful gift.
thanks for sharing it.
xx
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this had a lot of emotion flowing through it and i absolutely love it
i know how it feels to be in that position so dont ever feel alone
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this was a very good write, had alot of emotion in it and i must admit i have cut before myself, been emo a time or two and i love the piece that you wrote here. Good luck to you in the contest you have entered.
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Nice.
I like it. I think you could use a little more emotion but over all very good.
Veronica
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