Footprints in the snow
Sun glinting on the crust
Of frozen water
Beneath my boots
This is what I am
Away from you
Reflecting your smile
In unique patterns
Falling from the sky
Aloneness doesn’t mean
I am unhappy
Pausing for a moment
In unmarked tracks
Only my own following
Close behind
Staring at the sun
Blaring through the frostbitten
Trees cold and silent
Warm me
Sun and smile
Beam on me
With your last gaze of light
Through the last colors of orange
I almost see your face
And though the walk
Is a little colder
I keep walking
And know
You were thinking of me too
A contest entry
- Bored Enter!!!!! Need to Read Something!!!!! by fairytalelovestory.
700 points, ended January 8, 130 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - when I'm away from you by Lavender Butterfly.
550 points, ended January 10, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
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400 points, ended January 19, 100 entries
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400 points, ended March 22, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You had some very pretty images.
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First of all let me congratulate you on the silver. This was very deserving. It is filled with beautiful imagery. Usually I am more fond of rhyme but I like this. thank you for entering
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Thank you for entering, but it's not what I'm looking for at this time.
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The Poetic Bandits
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First congratulation on the Silver
Well desired, I really liked this stanze;
"Aloneness doesn’t mean
I am unhappy
Pausing for a moment
In unmarked tracks
Only my own following
Close behind
Staring at the sun
Blaring through the frostbitten
Trees cold and silent"
A truly outstanding write
LISA
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Outstanding
I thought this was a poem full of rich and vivid imagery that made me think of winter. I liked how you embraced the isolation and your choice of language -also the hint of romance at the end of the poem. Best of luck in the contest.
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"Reflecting your smile
In unique patterns
Falling from the sky"
I love the imagery in this, but especially the feelings you convey. That last stanza is amazing. This stands perfect to me the way it is, I wouldn't change a line.
Well penned,
~lost
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You captured the moment
and described it for us 'mere mortals'. You allowed the inner thought to become a poetic expression of your living.
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This is absolutley beautiful ~ truly descriptive and engaging. Thanks for such a superb piece. Much love and light, Lavender Butterfly... x
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A very beautiful write
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this is a very lovely write
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