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Lynne

 

 

I watch the splintered glass

spiral slowly downwards

like a million barbed snowflakes

that slice my outstretched tongue.

 

Inane giggles irrupted

from my constricted throat

as I spun among

the broken shards.

 

I watched a shadow

of a mourned memory

drop

from the open sky

and crashed through

the chipped concrete.

 

She jumped

and tried to touch

the summer stars

but flawed like Icarus

she fell to the earth.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


 

Author notes

In memory of a lady named Lynne, who was like a second mum to me. Who killed herself by jumping out of a ninth story window last June.

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  • pumpykin
    January 14

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    This is very descriptive and has wonderful imagery. I can really feel the deep emotion and sorrow. Great write, thank you for entering

    PS-Terribly sorry for the loss -__-


  • And Hyetal
    January 7

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    You should publish a book someday. I think you'd make a great story teller.


  • Jersene gold member
    January 7

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    impeccable imagery, and such heartfelt words...this poem is definitely felt. The story is sad, but you've written her beautifully!


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    January 6

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    Truly brilliantly written, gal. Your images make us experience the pain, even before we get all the way through and find out the whole story. I am terribly sorry for your loss and the tragedy that came to this beautiful person you loved. I am glad to see, however, that you have found the voice to write about her, and your experience with her passing.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    January 6

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    Gosh, this is so terrible and I am sorry
    for your loss. Take care and good luck
    to you with this entry here!




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