silent thoughts
confusion and anger
like how babies are made
checking the time
ready for 1:00
ready for sleep
only eye contact burns
explaining my tales
like a folk singer
with a quiet crowd
wanting the last bottle
waiting for your answers
too drunk to not cry
too upset to be sober
but your mouth is closed
lips with a tight seal
so my hope is failing
my prayers unheard
you will remain with
your silent thoughts
and i will remain in my
boxed in hell
Author notes
still living...
when will the silence stop?
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I like what you conveyed in this piece so many emotions and so many thoughts rolling around your head as you stay trapped in your own hell in which you can not break free needing answers that can not be found you've done an excellent job with this
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Tails = Tales
Quite = Quiet
a good write for what you're going through. You'll be fine.In a few days you'll start to get over it and be doing other things and everything will be fine for you.
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you always say that... and i guess your always right.
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somber and gritty in a good way!
"silent thoughts
confusion and anger
like how babies are made"
this opening was great and pulled me right in and then the rest just does not let up
"only eye contact burns"
the power of this line resonates with me very much.. and i could just keep quoting because every line is powerful and somber.. man ok one more quote.. "explaining my tales like a folk singer" what a great line. -
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thank you!
you give me some of the best comments.
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heaven and hell inside your head.
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