i sit here alone
i feel so numb
trace my scars
here it comes
grab my razor
slice down my skin
that beautiful sting
makes me smile again
drops of blood
so red and sweet
my skin so perfect
my cut so neat
my smile fades
and i need more
crazy slices
my blood pours
rivers of red
rolling down my arm
it makes me happy
to cause myself harm
take my razor
wanting dark red
cut myself deeper
blood sprinkles the bed
finally blood
is all i can see
my cuts, they
set me free
Author notes
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A contest entry
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Crazy slices indeed... I know the feeling.
Good poem, I relate to it, especially needing more after the first cut and getting the release/freedom from whatever it is you're feeling at the time.
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this is a very emotional amazing piece. my favorite lines are the last 4.
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i like how it went from easy going to a crazed feeling.
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This was great. I truly enjoyed reading it from beginning to end. Only 2 things I would point out.
In the 6th stanza, you misspelled something. "
blood spirnkles the bed" I assume you meant Sprinkles.
The only other thing I would suggest is that you use more punctuation. Even though I can kind of tell that the line ends when you go to the next one, I think maybe some commas and periods would be wonderful.
Good job and Good luck! -
"finally blood
is all i can see
my cuts, they
set me free"
Great Write and
Thank You for entering
Good Luck
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Dear peet what an incredible write of such depth and honesty.. I have self harmed but thankfully I havent cut for 10 years now. I know how it feels to want to cut more and more to blot out the pain...
I hope you find the strength to stop cutting and lift up your eyes to the beautiful person you are..
Love and Light AngelofLight xxxxxxxxx
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WOW.. amazing.. i love it.. very much like me.. ive cut myself since i was 12.. i know how u feel.. anyway.. amazing write.. come check out my poems.. i think u would like them
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not into cutting but very discriptive... gives me shivers :|
nice work
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