Like a black mold infestation
you started small
just a spot
a small dot on my conscience
with creepers and vines
and little tendrils of hope
You've taken over like that fungus in Dreamcatcher
And me? Where does that leave me?
Alone, that's where
you've sucked the life out of me
with your selfish and needy ways
I need more than what you can give
which isn't saying much
seeing as you can't really give anything if you've never had it in the first place
Author notes
About my best friend and his neediness and selfishness
A contest entry
- you and me and everything else by Ryno.
500 points, ended January 13, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Wow. I loved your angry and bitter tone. Sounds like you were really hurt. I got a lot out of that.
I thought the idea behind the first half was really strong, but then in the second half, I felt it wasn't worded as strongly as it could've been. I felt you needed more imagery and a stronger formatted/worded ending.
A good concept, however, and a lot of raw emotion behind this. Thanks for the entry. -
haha. wow.....thats kinda funny...the spite built in, at the end. and im sure people can relate. great job and good luck
Stephanie ♥
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