Nightingale who sings so sweet
Who soars across the sky
How is it you sing your tune?
How is it you fly?
My heart embraces your peacful ways
My soul wants to be free
I yearn to sing a song so sweet
To live and just be me
I live my life behind iron bars
My minds a living cell
Teach me how to come alive
From this home that I call hell
My heart will soon be free to live
My soul will find a door
I wish I may I wish I might
Teach myself to soar
Author notes
bookwrm1324(stephanie)
A contest entry
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What did you think
Comments
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Very short, to the point. The hope of freedom in its most absolute form, on the wings of a beautiful bird, who has nary a care in the world but singing its song and feathering its nest.
We all wish that freedom was so easy to come by. That we could just pick up and move at any moment that trouble comes by. To be miles away in mere seconds of taking flight.
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Lovely words and a wonderful poem for a beautiful bird. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
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i never understood whats so special about a nightinggale. or a whiporwill. or a bue jay. they are all pretty birds but i just dun get it. any ways. your poem is just amazing
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well the reason i used nightinggale is because there known for their singing. certain birds represent different things. i.e, the dove represents hope and the mockingbird represents innocence. and thank you =)
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wow.. you have no idea how much this poem relates to me and has a huge impact on me.. its really how i feel... caged and trapped with no escape.. wishing to be free.. but freedom has come to me.. and I'm adjusting to it slowly..
may freedom come to you as soon as possible.. because everyone really deserves it..
now for the poem--- AMAZING. your rhyme is fantastic and the way you write is beautiful.. well done
xx
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Beautiful!
This is a wonderful piece. Such beautiful words you have chosen to use. The flow and rhyming is also wonderful. Very nice job! -
Oh this was beautiful - such a longing to be free, I could almost hear the Nightengale's song myself-
I really enjoyed reading this ... You wrote it with such a flow, like I didn't want it to end - very descriptive also.
Thanks for entering
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OK, I'm shocked this poem hasn't won a gold, because this is amazing. I seriously can't find anything wrong with it. It flows perfectly and has a good ryhme and rythem.
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This seems oddly familiar.......
Like *cough* sweeney todd....
It was good though -
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Green Finch and Linnet Bird was my inspiration
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It was good hun
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I find this poem beautiful. You've done an absolute wonderful job. Thank you for sharing this with me. What would you like to be in my family? Excellent work... thanks for entering the contest. Kahy
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Goodness gracious. How beautiful! It was full of imagery and the way you arranged it and structured it. Nicely done.
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I felt really engaged with the beauty of life and flight withthese thoughts so beautifulled!!!!
your a finalist!!!! take it easy,
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I hear you I truly do
Often we hold ourselves back for fear of what others might think .But in doing so we deprive ourselves of a most joyous and loving life . If we just be ourselves and help others about us to show love and kindness always know their will always be those who criticize and never know this love .Never listen to others when you know within yourself what they say is not true . Move above them and find the joys and the love you so crave and in doing so you will fly . To receive love one must give it to see it returned and always always
think not of what others might think if you know what you are doing makes you happy . Reach out and open that door leave those old thoughts and sorrows behind and find this peace you so seak .
Sure I have had people say things about me and at times felt just by the way they look at me they disaprove but remember they arent you theres only one you and as long as you are being the best you can be and you dont enflict harm on others you shall fly
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Very touching and to feel the freedom of a Nightinggale and to feel so uplifting. Awesome write! -
I loved this!=)
i love this,Its so peaceful! Lots of people associate being free to a bird. its a classic way of looking at things. you can also make alot of mistakes with this kind of comparison. You made none. Im so impressed. It was well written and the rhyme scheme was brilliant!
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this is beautiful.
i'm never normally a fan of rhyme, but i love this, it really helps with the flow of the piece. you hold gorgeous imagery throughout with excellent descriptions.
i love birds =] they're so pretty.
and i love this poem, it's beautiful.
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This is great. A truly poetic piece. It flows really nice and has a song-like aspect about it. It's a sweet piece, very good.
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