You have left me.
Left me for good.
Or have you?
I loved you lots.....
In the life that you lived.
I grieve for you now,
That you are gone.
I can no longer say I love you.
Nor can I see you ever again.
I always hoped you would come back.
You never saw me cry.
Nor can you hear me now.
But I finally know where you are.
Never did before.
But I still loved you.
Still cared about you.
You were still my dad.
No one can take my place in your heart,
Nor can anyone take your place in mine.
But this is your last farewell.
But it's not mine.
Just to let you know....
Daddy I love you.
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laimra.
A contest entry
- Broken Sadness by SunDew.
1200 points, ended February 26, 54 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
tell me what you think. i am only 12 years old.
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:'(
I'm sorry about your dad. And I'm sorry you have a crappy step-dad, too.
Love your poetry!
Abi
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calm but sad..a great combination
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Very sweet & heart touching poem. It's so hard to except that a loved one is really gone when they die. It's just so hard to grasp.
These lines made me want to cry: You never saw me cry.
Nor can you hear me now.
I also love the very last line: Daddy I love you.
This is a sad part of life & u have captured it very nicely with your poetic words. -
Hey, again a great piece. The emotions and words in it are awesome. I really am impressed by how well you write, although only being 12. I again would say that you need more commas instead of periods, but other than that, it was well written. Keep up the penning, and in a few years you'll be an amazing poet.
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meaningful, you could feel the love in this poem...
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I really like it!! It is sad but peaceful and calm yet it starts a kind of spark in your brain causing you to think and feel the feelings of the person who wrote it.
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This strikes such a deep chord with me. I am left here wondering what to say - do I tell you a little of my story to show how I can relate so much to your write? Do I just tell you what an excellent poem you have entered? Do I do both?
Only one other person has written a poem that moved me to near speechlessness. You are now the second.
Your piece - what inspired it I can only guess at, but I see it was very painful. I have gone through something like this with my father & two oldest sisters. I shudder at the thought of a 12 year old going through all that hurt. My heart hurts for you.
Your poem is also unique in another way: one of very few that brings the tears to my eyes.
I wish you many happinesses & blessings in the rest of your years here on Earth. My deepest thanks for entering & sharing with me this fine piece of poetry. Good luck.
~Bright
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