Scrambling the net of hope,
my feet got stuck in longing
and the fear of breaking free
like an aching pain consumed me ...
I fell wholeheartedly into your
waiting arms ...
Eternally
grateful.
A contest entry
- 20 words by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended January 7, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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no need to revise, you express mans feeling of belonging gracefully
everyone need some place where they feel SAFE.
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a good poem, i like the hope and the smiles of love found here, a positive piece that shows the ache of love.
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Hope
And a little sweetness goes a long way. A mighty fine write youn g poet. Happy penning.
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I can relate very much to what you have written here and i think you have expressed yourself well your wording is quite lovely i like the word scrambling i think we do that often as humans
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This is a poem
with much meaning implied. My 'version' of what I experience you saying:
"scrambling the net
of hope and love
I feel fear
and pain
but into this heart
I fall ...
etnerally grateful"
Be blessed. Frans
Ps
You seem a humble sensitive person. I like this.
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thanks for entering.
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beautiful piece
great write
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very well writen poem as useal i love reading your poems it was short but very this was one of your best so far keep up the great work and thank you for sharing
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