...and maybe I'll go.
in the night-time of brightness,
in the day-time of darkness,
the between time of sunrise,
when our dream dies,
maybe I'll go.
Pretend you don't know me
and maybe I'll go.
the places we've dreamed of
the times we've schemed of
the sunshine that beamed of
our dream that we lived
maybe I'll go.
Pretend you don't want me
and maybe I'll go.
to the sad lonely places
the sad empty faces
where the heart's pulse races
for dreams that won't die
maybe I'll go.
Pretend I'm your phantasm
decked out in strange raiment
seeking agreement
before you say "Go".
Pretend I'm your lover
and then you discover
I'm just like another
to whom you said "Go".
Pretend that at midnight
we'll dance in the moonlight
we'll kiss in the daylight
so your lovers all know.
Pretend that you care
that I'm always there
pretend that you'll share
and you won't tell me, "Go".
Pretend you don't see me
for that should be easy
pretend you don't love me
surely then I will go.
A contest entry
- Screw The Roses, Send Me The Thorns! by Beautiful-Mistake.
700 points, ended January 16, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me want to fall in love by Spiritual Soul.
1200 points, ended May 28, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I can tell you wrote this with your heart. I really liked this, sad, but beautifully written. Thanks for your entry!
Blessings,
~Michaela~ -
good luck in my contest
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It puts me in mind of the Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock, actually; its odd rolling rhythm and musing thoughts both. I find myself unsure as to whether the speaker is already the lover of the addressed, or if breaking up is the theme. It might be neither! It's slippery that way, but I find that I do not mind so much. The rhythm of the poem is thrumming in my mind still, the repetition and rhyme. I am easily a lover of rhythm, and this has settled happily into my brain as one of the best rhythmic poems I've read in a while! Good one, Jimmy.
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Thank you Val
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Unusual presentation with this very interesting write. The repeating lines in the first three stanzas add emphasis along with the repeating word "go" in the remaining stanzas.
In my humble opinion this is an excellent piece of poetry.
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Such a sensitive and thoughtful poem, Jim. It is really beautiful and delicate, like a moonbeam across a still and dark lake
Lis.
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