When you are near I feel that I'm complete
And I can face the worst that life can do
The fruits I pick will all be ripe and sweet
Whenever I am standing next to you
Throughout our lives I know that we'll be two
Inside your trap I'm able to be free
Before we met I'm sure I slowly grew
But you supplied the final parts of me
Inside your eyes is all I need to see
You never hide the truths I need to know
I see your dreams as perfect poetry
And revel in the future that they show
A partnership for life is all I ask
And you, my love, are equal to the task
Author notes
Spensarian love sonnet as requested
(Spensarian sonnets rhyme abab bcbc cdcd ee with each quatrain expressing separate ideas linked by the "couplets" formed by the rhyme scheme, and terminated in the same way as Shakespearian sonnets, with a final couplet that wraps up the whole poem.)
A contest entry
- ~*~Be My Muse~*~ by Zane Rose.
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Comments
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Excellent. No complaints. All flowed nicely. One terrible, terrible thing, though, is that there is no closing bracket in the author notes! This type of sonnet is my favourite type of sonnet.
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I'm glad someone likes them, Spenser was a great poet, someone should love his form, it just isn't me
Thank-you for the kind comments, and I have fixed the missing right brace.
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AH! Thank you SOOOOOO much for doing a Spensarian sonnet! This is wonderful! Its a very beautiful poem and I loved reading it!
Good job, good luck, and keep up the great writing!
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You make Spenser proud! You know I counted the syllables and this is darn right perfect. Standing ovations sire!
Love,
Amera♥
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I always feel that Spenserian sonnets are too regimented, but - hell! - you never wrote a bad one yet.
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I am not a fan of them, keeping four way rhymes natural sounding is tough, but the contest holder says they are her favourite so I had another go
One day I shall get a good one, I have a thought for the right subject for one, but needs a great couplet and I'm finding those tough atm.
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Madi Herre...
Great work Jeff. -
very well writen you have writen a very beautiful love poem here my favorite part of this poem was when you said When you are near I feel that I'm complete
And I can face the worst that life can do
The fruits I pick will all be ripe and sweet
Whenever I am standing next to you
i enjoyed reading this poem keep on writing and i hope to keep writening
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