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Smoked Alive


See how I write words
    [pondered eyes]
built upon the illusion of a metaphor,

call it brilliance
whilst you tick
       tack me up
on a plastered belief:

       I was pretending
I didn't speak the way I wrote
;


All but a lie
wanting a kiss
crawled in your shadows 
back-bending bridge,

     

       they have walked upon
         that intoxicated liver
       you wish was not yours.

As my weight echos,
         Damn mass and gravity!
[the new age of conspiracy]

and I,

your pathetic belief
that someone was actually thinking

   have become the magician once again.

 

 

 

but can you watch me...

 

 

 

          disappear.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

do you really get it?



[try living in my head]

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  • February Moon gold member
    February 24
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    I love your poetry.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    February 23
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    Yes.



  • sideways hourglass
    February 23
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    Yes

    This was pretty good.


  • chilali
    January 7

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    I think I might get it a little bit! Muah! Love you and I love this.

    Best wishes,
    Ylova


  • Truth-in-Chaos
    January 5

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    I don't think I understand it, but that's what makes reading it all the more alluring. I always enjoy your poems. This one no exception.

    Much love,
    Steph


  • thejollytinker
    January 5
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    My head's bad enough and I think only you get your writes! I just enjoy the rides, Steph- G


  • maralisa silver member
    January 5

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    aw nthis wonderful your imagery is delightful I love your border I missed you where have you been hiding thank you for sharing maralisa


    • luna-midnight gold member
      January 5
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      aww thanks so much

      oohh...in a closet of thoughts...and away from...humanity..if we will.lol

      how are you?


  • Lady Australis silver member
    January 5
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    im not sure i get this baby doll but i do love you

    • luna-midnight gold member
      January 5
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      lol. it's okay, to be honest...i really dont expect anyone to get anything...especially me.lol


      and love you too how are you?

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