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Cry As I May

Water streams down my cheeks,
As I remember the time,
I wished that you'd leave her arms,
And forever be in mine.
And so I cry.

The light changes to darkness,
Without a passing glance,
I look up, at the sky,
Just taking a chance,
That I will not see your face,
In the stars.

Cry,
Cry as I may,
These tears will not wash you away.

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  • Nikonic Freak silver member
    November 20
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    "Cry,
    Cry as I may,
    These tears will not wash you away."
    That is absolutely beautiful.
    Great write, as always.
    ♥


  • Lady Juliet
    February 10
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    Thanks!
    And there's always room for revision


  • jbbrandi
    January 8

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    What's with you and always planning to revise your poems? They're perfect!!! lol
    I LOVE the first stanza. I can't explain which lines or why, but I love it.
    And the last line is amazing.
    "These tears will not wash you away."
    -gives gigantic thumbs up-