Leaning on the edge
of the white balcony balustrade,
with the tip of my forefinger
I followed the thin edge there
where my gaze stumbled
separating earth from sea,
separating the silence of horizon
from the racket of screaming gulls.
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Sails proudly followed
their own white reflections
scattered between
easy going morning waves,
the land of blue dolphins.
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At the top of a tree
a busy squirrel nibbled its pine nut
and I saw lovers holding hands
as under their feet
white stones
cracked by sun and salt and time
accepted their destiny.
*
Behind the curtains
another world,
as a precious carved boat
floating inside its own universe.
*
The sound of the south wind
brought me the music
and I danced
bathed by the smell of salt and conifers.
Again, I inhaled life.
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dolphins, gulls, lovers, each stanza has its own tone especially the first .. the syntax and end words and ceasuras all form a kind of ruffling, stamping, gentle chirp of longing power, a cray of gulls ... and the dolphin stanza is smooth and low and blue (for some reason
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the whole poem is a unity of tonalities and colors all befitting their own stanza
this is just amazing writing ...
I won't say I'm jealous. I won't
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you take me there. NICE JOB!
*Lea -
more than just a postcard with laced images. this is a hymn to nature and a human’s interface to it – through touches, sights, and... sighs. you own the softest of word pastels...
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I inhale this beautiful scene along with you through your poem -- gorgeous, Sonja! i love this --
"Behind the curtains
another world,
as a precious carved boat
floating inside its own universe."
it brings such a feeling of getting away from it all. i think i need a vacation..lolol.
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Window to the senses!
Ah my! Each vignette is as a sparkling facet making up the jewels entirety, peeking out at Nature's soul. Outstanding work indeed my sweet friend.
This is definately one of those times I tell self..Now why didn't you write that??? But knowing I will definately put something to paper today, you have inspired me big time ***Applause****
Best wishes!
love and blessings, Sandi
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Outstanding
The imagery in this poem really sets it a part and I love how you create a different mood in each stanza creating layers of meaning. Your choice of language is excellent. My favourite poem that I have read today. Best of luck in the contest.
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Well I shall put it in the catgegory of a prayer..and that way this is the most intimate journey you did with the UNKNOWN..and made it to KNOW....well done..
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how lovley my dear fellow poet, again description that takes you to that scene, its a relaxind read a calm sense washes over you as you read
"the land of blue dolphins"
a magical line and finally it ends on a very great line my favourite
"Again, i inhaled life."
adored this read well done xxx
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beautiful
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Great poem
Behind the curtains
another world,
as a precious carved boat
floating inside its own universe.
*
The sound of the south wind
brought me the music
and I danced
bathed by the smell of salt and conifers.
Again, I inhaled life.
Hey, this poem is beautiful i enjoyed reading it. u have beautiful work n its marvelous. outstandin job n beautiful write.
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Perfection ...
just that which I needed today ...
Love
Myra
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Lovely, as always.
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SO LOVELY!!!!!
All of the emotions which can come from the many sights and sounds around you are amazing!'s One just has to be slient and let them reach out to you!
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