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That Little Blue Line

I'm sat on the bathroom floor,
wondering what the hell to do.
My life is about to change
and I don't have a clue.
 
How do I tell my daddy?
I'm going to be a disgrace!
How about I never leave this bathroom?
I'll live on shampoo and toothpaste!
 
Honestly it was just the one time,
I'm only seventeen for Christ sake!
Well now I've gone and done it
and chocolate isn't going to fix this mistake.
 
I know we used protection,
but maybe the condom split?
I wish I drank less that night,
because now all I can think is 'shit!'.
 
I know I'll have to face the music,
leave this bathroom at sometime,
but I can't make myself stand up,
my eyes won't leave that little blue line.

Author notes

Inspired by a friend of mine who now has a beautiful 2 year old daughter and who has discovered that becoming a mum at 17 is not the worst thing in the world.

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  • Drifter-In-The-Wind
    March 29

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    oh my god this is such a great write!!

    i have many friends and cousins who have been in this same situation but rather than turning to their parents, they usually turn to me and ask me what to do when im only the same age as them

    but excellent choice of words ... it really made me gasp and think about my past ...

    xo


  • usefuldistraction
    March 10
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    Very good observational piece of writing.


  • Eamon
    February 24

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    it's has scary undertones hidden behind the words.

    Bloody good write.

    hurts in so many ways its so hard to
    find your way around and through it.

  • maryjanes
    February 21

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    you captured your friends emotions very well, and your stanzas were placed great, the fact it took place in the bathroom for the whole poem was better than those that lead to boy and girl fighting, instead you make it work with just one side. nice job


  • RainbowEyes
    February 18

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    Wow. recently I had sex with a guy to try to prove to myself that maybe i'm not a lesbian and now I think I'm pregnant. This poem made me cry... it's so scary...


    • Emerald-Eyes
      February 18
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      Thank you.
      I really hope it all works out for you, good luck if you are pregnant.
      xx


  • serenity silvermoon
    February 10

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    great poem i like the title as well i didn't know what to think when i saw the title but you know what they say you cant judge a book by its cover i thought this was about you until i read your AN this was me in a way 2 of my uncles died a week before i found out i was pregent and i over dosed before i knew but the baby was safe and so was i again i had an angel watching over me thanks for sharing tell your friend i wish her great love and luck with her family


  • Trapped Destruction
    January 21

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    I love this! I'm actually the child of a mother who somewhatly had this occur. ha ha and now i'm her age when it happened....sorry i jus liked it and the thought occured to me so i wanted to comment. but good job, i like it.

  • piccola silver member
    January 18

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    I was intrigued by the title! I thought it would be about the police force and their thin blue line. This is not an un-familiar subject and yet you managed it without being cliche'. Good job and thank you for the entry.


  • moderndayvampire
    January 12
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    cool

    clever and has a very real feel to it,thanx for sharing.


  • Nemuae
    January 10
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    Hey there. I am pregnant right now, so if you need any advise, please feel free to message me. I love your poem. It just hits home. Finding out your pregnant can be very scary at first...expecially if your are not prepared for it.

  • Bruce silver member
    January 6

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    Great feeling and imagery. It was so real I thought you were speaking from personal experience until I read the notes!


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 5

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    Powerful piece. Hits home for me. I thought I was pregnant, had all the signs for two months. I finally got the courage to take a test. I sat praying the whole time. It came out negative. I was scared to death though. Great write, awsome flow and rhyme. Love the humour elements in this piece. Bravo!

    ♥ Kathraina

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