Thread weaved into a web
of fallacious behaviour.
Glimmering with the coating
of your words, the pretty sweets
so easily swallowed.
You want to sleep easier, i can imagine
You want to rid that image: two children,
a dark house, no food and no heat, no light and
no love, because you left.
Now you live your life and smile so it's ok.
You tell lies so no one can whisper,
"what a terrible mother, how could she do that"
Instead its, "what awful children, poor woman."
Here I sit, in a different country with family
I barely know, the one i love back 'home' .
My life gets the kick, to screw it all up, while
you get to sit back and have whatever you want.
All the bad people, who messed up my life
who gave me vile memories and ruiend me as a child,
haven't hurt me as much as what you've done now.
From an angry pen, i'll get it all out,
because i'm sick of being the one to blame.
I know this was all your fault ,
and i won't make that mistake again.
With this note i'll end it:
To be hurt by someone who is supposed to love you
more than anything, and always be there for you...
hurts a hell of a lot more than all the other
assholes who mean nothing and are just bad people.
Author notes
This, isn't exactly a poem that i want critical comments about form, structure rhyming or any of that, this is just because i had a lot to say, i havent said most of it but i need ot get this all out. Its not meant to be a work of brilliance, or art all its meant to do is stop me smashing my monitor... i may need that for when i do want to write real poetry.
All swirly type backgrounds are compliment of James, or Dorian-Gray (on this site)
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A contest entry
- ~Prompt Series~ by Frozentearz.
1000 points, ended January 22, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Just Let Go by Gay-Militant.
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I love it, you say how you feel and there's nothing bad about that. I hope that things turn out a little better for you best of luck.
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To be hurt by someone who is supposed to love you
more than anything, and always be there for you...
hurts a hell of a lot more than all the other
assholes who mean nothing and are just bad people
here here !! lol
so true but i would never have thought of putting it like tht
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The pen and quell a great way of getting things out
and keep yourself standing.
Thanks for joining in warm thoughts.
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Have to agree there, this is wonderfully written and really gets the feelings across. A great read. Not something anyone should have to deal with, this situation.
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well, the structure is perfect, he word choice is extreme, and the feeling overflowing. this more a poem than most of what i read on here.
i'm glad you got it all out. this was an amazing read. i just hope your heart heals with it.
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Thank you very much for the comment. It is much appreciated. As is your applause.
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Very heartfelt and deep emotion here. I am not sure how I relate it to the prompt other than you must still be standing as you are here to write it down and get it out. Thanks for entering! I hope the writing continues to help you in your journey of release.
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tyvm for the comment, tbh i dont think its easy to see how i relate it to the prompt, unless you know me personally and the reason behind this poem.
Thanks for the comment. If you want to know the reason why, i can explain.
Laura.
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A stunning and very sad piece, enough to break the Sphinx's heart...well done and powerful stuff here...
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After reading that I feel angry for you! Very descriptive piece and I love that it comes across as blunt and harsh, like you've just spat all the words out to be heard.
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I really like how descriptive you were, and how you worded everything....very powerful. I am very sorry that you had to go through that. I really, really love this poem.
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very expressive. so sorry you have to go through this. keep penning, it definitely helps to get it out some.
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I thought this was great. A poem filled with emotions and very well expressed. Well done
Love the background.
Much love and best wishes,
Ylova
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Thank you very much for the comment. The background is my author page background and my mate made it for me ^^ i think ill get him to remake it with red.
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Nice I see t hat now! Haha. One your main page, you've got a different color on the borders though, right? And I think it'll look killer in red! You should totally force him to do that! Haha
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Yes, i have a yellow version on the borders xD ill have to rememeber to ask him to do that later.
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