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In our darkness did love die
in my heart the question why
on my lips I taste a sigh
as you whisper your goodbye.


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that is to say a 7-7-7-7 syllable form, with an AAAA rhyme pattern.

I always get these things wrong please remove of unacceptable.

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  • second-born
    January 16

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    very sad...and poignant...truly emotions could be well-expressed even in such a short piece...thank you for sharing your poem!


  • serenity silvermoon
    January 5

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    very well writen very sad i thank you for sharing this poem it made me cry it reminded me about how i lost my uncle to suicide when i was twele keep on writing you are very good at it and i will always keep on reading


  • doolie gold member
    January 5

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    I really like your poem. Heartfelt and sad. Good luck in the contest.

    Laura


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    January 5

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    I don't know this form but I like this! Your syllable count is perfect too! I think you did good! Pam