Melancholy, steeped inside portrayal
hopelessly retained where trapped inside
abysmal days, are years long much denied
where steadily they backtrack to a crawl.
From there, the darkest mysteries suffice
to notably less worthy ones that formed;
destroying most, the charities less warmed
and having lost the best things life made nice.
from inside looking out the bleak released
is thus caved in, whilst others looking in,
Can see, what changed in sloth’s deceitful grin
was living life like death, and now deceased.
how idleness conceives to closing eyes,
then making it the master of diguise.
In a list
A contest entry
- For Which Of 'The Deadly Seven' Are You Guilty ? by Candyknife.
700 points, ended January 10, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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very nice
stunning imagery, and great word choice as always
i liked your direction and executed youre point nicely
thanks for entering, good job -
powerful!
wow, a masterful tale my friend, i loved this piece from the first word..lots of luck to you in the contest..
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A wonderful depiction of sloth. Loved the lines, "how idleness conceives to closing eyes, then making it the master of disguise." Loved the Read Bravo!
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