I am dejected desire, carried forth on wings of fire
Nobody knows of my tortured insides, battle axe
bleeding my hearts pride
Whimsical paraphrenia killing me there, mirror of
my despair, bloody cold and impaired
Time and time again I did nothing but bemoan
Fucked up my life all on my own
and the mirror shows it all, scars that recall
conflicts galore
At war with stupid bitches I adored
Scratches long and bloody disfiguring, shotgun blues
on streets of bickering
Rain on my ruptured heart
River of tears tearing my dark soul apart
And the mirror of my despair shows it all, revealing
secrets I could never share
Revealing this internal transparent wall
Oh if only I had loved and cared, taken time to
treat you fair
Given to lady pain such unrivalled love to beware
This scarlet one I see, shaken by the fear of her
You who I see in the mirror, you the destructible
little terror
Mirror of my despair, mirror of pain
Shaking my mind into new domains
and cutting my soul into thousands of pieces
There you showed me who I should fear
For there I saw my soul awash in tears so severe
Unmasking my true self blue
Author notes
If what you see in the mirror is sombody you hate, than how can you expect
others to love that person you see.
In a list
A contest entry
- ---- MIRRORED IMAGERY ---- by Ademon.
1500 points, ended January 11, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Mirror Mirror On The Wall-- by Ignis Corpus.
550 points, ended February 28, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Mirror...mirror... by SummerlandRayne.
729 points, ended June 25, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites from January by Miss Faerie.
700 points, ended July 1, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Scales, Mirrors, and Ourselves (Optional prompts) by technicolor girl.
400 points, ended August 6, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie # 25 of 37! Prewrites...Prewrites...Give me your prewrites!! by Beautiful-N-Broken.
700 points, ended November 22, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites!!! by MoonlitRoses.
400 points, ends December 10, 100 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
Any thoughts I'll much appreciate
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OH my goodness what a powerful write. You did an excellent job painting a picture with your words, the pic you put with it fits it so well. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
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the realism here is stark..and unnerving...and yet...completely excellent....to look in the mirror and see someone unreccognisable staring back...to see the fragments of inner torture merge together to create something hideous....wow you portrayed all that so well here....this is a piece of art my friend
T
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Wow, I really love what you've done here! While the profanity was a little shocking (maybe a tad unnecessary?) it worked well here to enforce the emotions being portrayed. Nicely done!
bravo and thank you for entering
♥ kate -
Nice Poem
Your poem is nice but I don't understand what "paraphrenia" means. -
Wow. This was really moving and very enjoyable too read. You had some real strong emotions and feelings in this piece. Thank you for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.
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Congratulations on your many wins with this piece, this is a truly insightful piece. I love the strong ending you have here.
♥
whisper
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this is really something, good luck in contest.
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Great poem. I loved reading it, the words flowed so well.
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wow that pic is crazy and as for the write amazing I see others agree looking at the trophies you have for this so far
thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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This is a pensive piece, Poet. My own mirror tells lies, usually cruel ones. 
The thing is, don't listen. Or look in someone else's mirror who loves you...their eyes, for instance. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks for your entry
Your vocabulary is amazing. Your word choice brilliant, imagery effective and each word seemed to explode into the next.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
Shari
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GRIPPING!!!
I loved this...really!
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Great piece of writing
I can only aspire to write something so deep and descriptive. -
Just as a double edged sword can cut both ways, so can a mirror reflect both sides of the same person! You seem to have given all your power to the dark side, which is only half of who you are.
I think a second poem focusing on the positive side of light that dwell's within you as well needs to be written and so, bring about some balance.
For every dark poem I write, I counter it with a positive one. Good and evil are twwo sides of the same coin. They are both nessasarry!
Reguardless, this is an excelent entry in the contest and well deserving of the Golds already won.
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Excellent!
This is, as I'm sure you know, a damn fine piece of writing. It is dark, depressing, and even has some meaning to it. Excellent job with this poem!
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I'll tell you what, this is one of the MOST poetic pieces I've read by far on my two plus years on All Poetry. I can't get this one out of my head. It is by far, one of my favorites, for you describe the soul of (or how we think we look) everyone. I really wish you the best of luck in this contest.
Ignis Corpus -
omg this write gave me goosebumps, which is awesome in my books, brilliantly penned!!
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i love this poem
i can relate so much
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If you were writing about how you feel about yourself you should be feeling better for getting all that out.If not you than you portrayed this person and how they were feelig beautifully.You are a talanted writer and shold always write because the readers can relate to you well.Great job.
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I wish for more original words to use when commenting this. A free and wild rhytm, a heavy, true feeling, the reflection of your life so vidid and powerful. This is the metal of poetry... mixed with some icecold blues. \m/
This is one of the few times I wanna keep a poem I've read here... I will not. As this perfection might stain my own writings... hah. I'll add you as a favorite though, this ink is gold.
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Brilliant
the first line hooked me in
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Impressive
I too am a little blown away by this amazing piece, Ilove the layout too and your guitar pic is a bit fab, seriously this was one of the best dark writes I read so far take care kathrin xx
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WOW! I am floored...this was wow
Time and time again I did nothing but bemoan
fucked up my life all on my own
and the mirror shows it all, scars that recall
conflicts galore
at war with stupid bitches I adored
So, So, so, so true...You've written a dark master piece here and I'm thoroughly impressed! thank you!
your AN notes hit pretty close on the money as well.
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