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I Miss You

I miss you, I
shouldn't have let you go.
I shouldn't have said no to you.

I feel foolish, I want you back.
I love you to much to leave it
all alone. I grieve for my heart
when I'm not with you/

Lost and bleeding, I can't feel
anything any more. I miss you
more than anything. I need you
to live and breathe. You've taken
my heart.

Don't let me lay here bleeding.
Please tell me you'll
forgive me, take me back. Keep
me warm. Let me live with myself
in peace.

I miss seeing you. I miss your smile.
I miss you kind eyes. I miss you
so much. Please,
please tell me everything
will be okay.

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  • Sunkissed xo
    January 31

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    A very soft and heartfelt write. I think a lot of people can relate to this situation you're discussing.
    Thanks for entering my contest. Best of luck


  • still.she.waits
    January 11

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    you have until 11 p.m. on Jan 13th to enter a new write, to go with your prewrite, if you do not enter one, this entry will be deleted. please put your name in the authors note, this is your one and only warning.


  • just sam
    January 7

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    It's beautiful, very moving and obviously heartfelt. I do however think that proof reading could be a very good thing for you to learn... this does not take away from the loveliness of the poem... it's just my job to pick these things up so I'm a bit of a Nazi about it. For example line 5 to should be too, just little things like that. Other than that I really liked this piece mostly because of the apparent love behind it.


  • BrokenSanity
    January 5

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    I can feel the sense of longing here, I hope this was not inspired by reality?? If so, I hope you will get what you seem to yearn for so much. A beautiful write. Keep penning, poet.