Lying
Cheating
Hating
Taking
Hitting
Yelling
Pinching
Throwing
Pushing
Fighting
Talking
Cussing
Dying
Moving
Breaking
Cutting
Forging
Being
Feeling
Loving
Author notes
Is there a better way to arrange these? Or a better order?
A contest entry
- Dark, cutting, suicide, sadness, depression by stargardt13.
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This was a very unique way to write this poem. I liked your free form very much. The emtions and actions go well with me contest. Thank you for sharing your poem with me and entering it in my contest.
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you know, i still like yours better. im always too analytical... too objective.
which rubs against the grain of every grain of poetry. its supposed to be free. of rules. and limits. and i limited it. I made it impossibly structured, and still wanted it to work. and it didnt. i shouldnt have even tried. yours is so much better -
i like this one better. with the alphabetical one, you could see the cliched order. here, it's just an emotional order that goes much deeper.
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Thank you.
that's exactly how i hoped people would interpret it.
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I actually thought of that, but decided I wouldn't be able to include what i wanted.
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you should have one for each letter of the alphabet. ill do a rewrite.
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