To take you in my arms but once,
To kiss your lips so bold,
To feel your heart beat next to mine,
To feel your tender hold.
To feel our passions rise as one,
To touch your skin so fair,
To feel your fingers stroke my face,
To feel your soft black hair.
To feel my yearning melt in you,
To know my journey’s end,
A moment locked as one in fate,
To deep to comprehend.
Forever I would give for you,
And die at last in peace,
Just one night to be with you,
Would be my sweet release…
To gaze into your eyes at last,
Would be my life complete,
To hear you speak your love aloud,
An end I’d gladly meet…
And truly, I’d give up forever to touch you…
Author notes
Pic & Lyric prompt...
Iris by the Goo-Goo Dolls...
In a list
A contest entry
- I'd Give Up Forever To Touch You by PastelMoons.
1000 points, ended January 20, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow this is beautiful. Speaks words I have longed to hear. Loved this write and the flow. Speaks to me.
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should be Gold
dazzling, I oh my all oh,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, what a write my dear brother -
o my...where is my fluffy when I need him...Drag Aine is right, would make a beautiful love song...
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To feel my yearning melt in you,
To know my journey’s end,
A moment locked as one in fate,
To deep to comprehend.
wow, would like to hear you sing this
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What a gorgeous poem, inspired by a gorgeous song! Your flow is really smooth and choice of language perfect in this poem. Gave great emotion and imagery, well done!
Keep it up,
Stardust xx
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Absolutely beautiful and romantic!!
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So lovely Fritz, wistful and longing. Another nice romantic one, well done. Sheila
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You are such a romantic... Beautiful!
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Aww such emotions are felt
The yearning to be loved and touched
The feelings flow in tainted sadness wishing....
Good luck in the contest hun
Julie
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this was an amazing take on the prompts- i love iris... i sing that song in the shower all the time lol this was so beautiful and heartfelt- it made the yearning real for me. an amazing write as always fritz. good luck!
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You have captured the essence of this song. To me this is a winner in every respect. Gold Gold Gold! Bravo Poet
Mariana
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A superbly penned piece, you really nailed the prompt here hunni. Good luck but I really don't think you'll need it
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Beautiful
penned with passion
and desire
Thank you so much for
entering
~Pastel
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You have certainly done the prompt justice here. I love that song, and your take on it is beautiful.
This is a wonderful blend of the dark and the light. The desperation and need mixed with the pure love and emotion is a very powerful recipie indeed.
Best of luck in the contest.
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Wow
This is so filled with life, nice and bright not so dark as some of your poems. This is a change for you and it looks like a good change. I hope you win this contest.
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well I must say this is a very deep complexing but well penned poem. I really loved the picture prompt you were given here for the contest entry and it really made me fele like I was there watching this all unfold with you and her and just wow! it made me cringe a bit because I been hurt so badly recently that well I can completley understand the poem and the feeling you were going for. any ways just a flawless well penned write and the very best of luck in the contest
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Aw...
How sweet... I like that. I wish you good luck in this contest. I loved it.
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