Abusing Stares
Cold condemning stares at me, a harsh experience.
Why must your heart be so hard, has your spirit found death?
Where do you get off, judging by mere appearance?
Are you so immature that your judgment has no depth?
This doesn't matter to me, you're no star in my eye.
You've only seen me pass by, on I go, down the street.
You don't know me, I don't know you, walking on, good bye.
Fleetingly our eyes touch, never again, will we meet.
I get home, up to my room, perfect solitude.
Our encounter wasn't pleasant to me, zero bliss.
My heart asks, "Why does he hate us", a sad, thoughtful mood.
What shall I tell my inner-child, about all this?
In his innocence will he understand, insight anew,
about human cruelty, pride, such lovelessness.
Hurting me was fine, but not him, now explain, yes you.
What masking perfume will cover awful thoughtlessness.
You can't cover a black deed with white lies, sin's not free.
Hurting a little one is such a crime, glad your gone.
My inner-son named me, is now scarred, because of thee.
You've committed inner-child abuse, a great wrong.
Author notes
This is a poem about how sometimes people give evil looks to people they don't even know based completely upon the appearances of their character and/or situation in life. But they don't stop to think that these looks probably hurt the other person's feelings. Having been on the receiving end of at least a few of them ,i can tell you that they do indeed hurt.
What do you think,gently speak your mind .
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This is a very powerful poem.
I get home, up to my room, perfect solitude.
Our encounter wasn't pleasant to me, zero bliss.
Can so identify, some really can delude themselves....
Very abstract in the last two stanza's yet still leaving room for total revelation of the moral instilled.
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very powerful emotions are evoked from this piece
a great piece -
you had a really great word choice on so much of this poem you did amazing
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When i read your poem, only one word came into my mind and it was oh my god. This is beautiful, and everyone can relate to it.
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amazing, such a great subject choice as well, i loved how you perfectly encapsulated people judging others simply by their looks, wonderfully written with a strong flow, well done
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Good subject matter
I think it is okay, the subject matter is good.although I think some of the terms used are a little "new agish".the metre is a little off and some of the emotion is a little raw and not as developed poeticly as it could be, I think. Good job,keep writting. -
beautifully pieced together i like the feel . the sadness of the poem is prevelant...i like it a lot
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Well done!
You caught a moment in rhyme expsosing it for what it is. The deeper darker side of human nature that we often choose to ignore.
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Very nice write Stevie. Love it.
Fav line: "Cold condemning stares at me, a harsh experience"
First line caught me, and i wanted to read more.
strong words. love it. abusing stares, what a title, simply amazing.
Great write, loved reading it.
Shannon
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I really like the way this is written, it is great...
Gwen
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This is so beautiful Stevie. Your words are crafted in such a unique way and you speak to the inner child in us all. Forget those who have looked at you this way. I see you and you are beautiful
Mariana
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interesting write . . true that people do this without thinking at times . . try to ignore it or to forgive them . . well done !!
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Wonderful write. Strong words. Perfect discreption and the feel of pain from looks that seem to be so threatening.
Great Job!
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I love it stevie it shows something tht everyone does even if by mistake
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good
I loved the way you used your metaphors within the comparisons of yourself and your innocence, and sins and etc. The child abuse at the end kind of threw me off. I thought the poem was about judgment and stares so i kind of expected it to end on that note somewhat. Anyway, good job. Don't pay attention to these funny-acting people. Like you said, never again will we meet. So why care? -
gorgeous poem.
well done! =)
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