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not salty at all.

My love for ever resembles an ocean
in width and depth it wins the heart.
But not  in respect of  of chewing her nectar dipped lips , not salty at all.

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  • Blossom Fairy
    January 6

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    Well said, good Pirate, for the lady's lips taste of nectar and not salt, and your ocean metaphor is well taken. Thank you for coming to our group contest!


  • Emerald Lass
    January 6

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    OH MY! A wonderfully romantic ocean poem, yes certainly. Written by a true pirate, I do think.