Inhabitants of boiling vessels; poisoned blood,
no wings anymore
to escape from this sweet-darkened valley,
where death haunts on up-side-down ossifications.
Innocence is reproductive, a lost myth
between jaws of murdered machinery.
Faked commands wither into dying whispers,
powerless, fossils sit on moon's chair.
Alchemical stream feeds on theories, hollow
air-bubbles in sunlight, mind's cannibalism reveals.
Melting iron now fondles with embryonic visions.
Speechless vampirism, beaten by the mother
of all names, drown in her sea of milk.
Into my hands, a world with its liquid dreams,
mankind's compass a longing arrow into future's eye.
Author notes
Option #4: "Fog clouds the vision of paths we are to take".
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Yeah, me too. Dictionary is useful, but the mechanics of your storytelling does really do it all. A sharp edge sometimes... along with a metal grinding sound... as well as the thud of a sledgehammer. Modern society, the mechanical age, the age of reason... killing all in sight.
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Wow, great imagery.
I always have to pull out a dictionary when I read your poems, and I love you for it
These lines are just awesome
'Faked commands wither into dying whispers,
powerless, fossils sit on moon's chair.'
Best of luck
Love
Sonya
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The Matrix is hollow. Thank you for sharing! Heartfelt and commanding!
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Faked commands wither into dying whispers,
powerless, fossils sit on moon's chair.
I really liked these two lines. You did a great job with this. Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest. -
very well written
God bless you my friend...
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thanks...may God bless you also
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Well rare is it that I am speechless! but you have penned something that has left me this way.
Totally loved the whole poem
Its strange addiction draws me..
Thank you for your wonderful, deep poem
Best wishes
Julie
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Thank you
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