I've taken to wearing drunk goggles around the house and yard
just to give myself a new outlook on the everyday things
I wear yellow tinted glasses at school
because white boards are so last year
I need something to spark my interest again
these motions are involuntary
this music's old and stale
Conflict resolution is the highlight of my day
screaming matches that make me feel alive
rage is the only thing I am capable of
rage and despair
this is not healthy
this is not normal
I need to shower
A contest entry
- superficial onions by notorious.
912 points, ended January 11, 12 entries
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i liked your progression in the opening stanza, it felt natural, "white boards are so last year" i'm not sure you got the full effect there.
old & stale music is a strong image, the antiquity feel of lost notes, although contemporary elsewhere.
"screaming matches that make me feel alive" the simple line worked well here.
and the ending lines summed everything up with the desire to wash away everything
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Reads off like a stream of consciousness.
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hmm... I didn't mean it to come across that way, but I guess that's usually how I write. word vomit, mostly.
Thanks for the applause.
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"Word vomit." I LOVE IT!!!
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haha. It's a rather apt description, though.
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i love it. it fits perfectly
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thank you.
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