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Broken Hearts Never Heal

She falls to
the ground and
can't get up

Everything is different,
nothing will ever
be the same

Her heart is
broken and shattered
ignorance she recieves

Can that guy
break the chains
around her heart?

Will he ever
know how she
felt about him?

All said and
done she's still
sad and alone

What can be
said; nothing; she
cries in pain

When the sun
rises, she feels
sad as before

Nothing makes her
happy anymore for
she's shut down

He loves her
but someone else
loves him too

In the end
she remains alone
he remains happy

This is what
she had wanted
for him and herself

Tears run down
her beautiful face;
happiness is fading

But now why
is it she
feels different now?




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  • rainbows.
    July 7, 2009

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    ignorance she recieves > receives

    Thank you for entering this piece into my contest. I really like it; it is short and sweet. Could use more imagery and metaphor. But other then that I like it; lots of emtoions.


  • xochocoholicxo
    May 19, 2009
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    so many emotions it was really good
    thanx 4 entering best of luck


  • Xxnightmare21xx
    March 16, 2009

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    Wow, i really liked this poem. I hope you do well in the contest. It had a lot of emotions in it. Great write.

    kaycee


  • xunjustredemptionx
    March 16, 2009
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    thanks for entering great write


  • psychedelichippie
    March 12, 2009

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    I can sense a lot of emotion. But perhaps, mixed emotions... I was a bit confused. But all and all, I liked it. thanks.


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    February 22, 2009

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    This such a sad and emtotional write. I could feel the emotion and pain in this as I was reading it. Thank you so much for entering my contest. all the best.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 19, 2009

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    Awww this makes me feel so sad
    can relate to this one, I'm always the one who is being broken by someone.


  • SarahEatsAirplane
    February 13, 2009

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    i enjoyed the way you sectioned out this poem into three line stanzas. it added to it a lot.
    i get a deeper feeling than what i just read. like the words seem to sink in more and have more meaning than it seems.

    i'm not sure if that makes sense to you. haha

    good job.
    good luck.


  • tears.of.silence gold member
    February 9, 2009

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    wow

    sounds like the exact same situation that I am in.. I hate it when someone else goes through what I am going through because no one deserves to feel that pain, that agony, that hurt, that devestation.. You did a really good job, thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you.


  • Chris Lee
    February 4, 2009

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    another sad one, the presence of such strong emotions make it easy for the reader to connect with the piece. i hope you're ok.


  • Ryan79
    January 7, 2009

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    How could he do that? I hope that this sad time passes. The poem is very sad and I can feel the emotions.

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