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Massively Wordered Society

Creeping through dimensions

with worderous intuitions
We’re back slamming backgammon,

dice roll with precision
Boasting boisterous word play,

frying the eggs that birds lay
Ignorant ignoramuses incarnate our woeful prey
We ambidextrously eliminate haters systematically
Vicariously vexing vocabulary tragically
Automatically we scramble brains biologically
leave them stained with the strains of our verbal virology
it’s a hypocrisy not to accept our democracy
debate our scientology or respect our philosophy
diabolically decimating, decapitating and dissipating
kinetically constipating thoughts of participating
dedicating this one to the wondrous flow
check the mass destruction as the worderers blow..

Massively wordering, as we bring this urban thing
to the masses, you gasping(wondering)..who we wordering?
but we laughing, as you grasping,

for answers about the spit we bring

contusions we cause 'em,

 from verbage we tossed 'em

as we keep singing.. knowledge is king

from the days of old come rays of new

you stumble through

thoughts mixed from this verbal brew

it's that nastiest,

wordiest one, son of fun, bright as the sun,
been a long journey yet this run ain't done,

so think I'll just toss it to another one..

Our cheques are in the mail and the cat’s caught his tail
Flailing about now ‘cause that rocker won’t let him bail
Frail lyrics don’t phase me—
It takes a lot to amaze me;
I laugh to myself at those who’d like to scathe 'we'
But we’re quick with our wit—off the top shelf
Word Chiefs,

In Top health (how exquisite!)
Sour brains wish to quiz it
Buzzed right when we left; straight for the exit
Next it’s our extemporaneous style
So what if you’ve been around for a while?
We’re from the land of ‘the dirty dozens’
We mastered the ‘verbal parallel bars’

When we were out snow shoveling
What’s to resolve then?
It’s no surprise to find them grovell’n
The judicious use of a well-placed word
We slice through wind—if you haven't heard
Categorically capricious, conniving can’t counter us
We sit down in the Elderly seats—at the front of bus
Discussing our tacit tactics, with energized didactics

I’m trying to manage damage control The brink of death is paying its toll These creatures to my left are under the road Lost consciousness and now I’m back on the honor roll My words cause ‘Your honor’ to stroll Made off (Madeoff) Like Bernie, now your money is under the stove Filled the surface with hard rocks, Wordz were crossed out, but etched in Comstock Intentions of worders from around the clock I grab the gravel from under block, I stabbed the cattle with dietary stocks Controlled the rights of left handed cops Exploited and expanded options as the Dow dropped Massively mundane like Mondays Travesties to the brain peek through on Sundays Wonderers fun day, cease the violence through gun play The beast comes through, some say The Massacre, I’ve released on crews during Love day In the mud, you’re dragged, the slum’s this way Tore off your gum to expose your tooth’s decay Warn off the host of AP when posting the ghost of Bombay I’m usually subtle, but decided to let my Wordz loose like The Fray The wondrous words culminate each and every day Yup, "we're from the land of the dirty dozens" two hands full of fire as we sling ghetto slang at your cousins Mixing gin and rum after a dozen of muffins Fixating while sending faxes over seas in Cuba cigar puffin' Go ahead, test these worderers if you think we're bluffin' Cease and sicle or get stuffed in...instead, Wheel it back like a 'ragga muffin!' 

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    September 4

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    OMG!!!!!!

    This is just so clever and on the money You guys wurdered beautifully. There are so many lines in this that were just soooo good.

    "Creeping through dimensions
    with worderous intuitions"

    "We mastered the ‘verbal parallel bars’
    When we were out snow shoveling "

    I cannot even list them all. Reading this as a whole is amazing. It sings with verbal ability, concept, and the reality of rhetoric at its finest.

    So so glad to have popped in here today. Excellent. ~Pamela


    • Swangrnv gold member
      September 4

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      l.o.l.

      why thank you my dear! we are all very appreciative of your wonderful comment and are happy you found this piece to your liking..and your support for me especially is treasured..

  • The first part which for me is a vocabulary encyclopedic travel through unknown worlds you just wanna big bang into, reincarnate and discover a new universe!
    Breathtaking....

    • Swangrnv gold member
      August 28
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      l.o.l.

      i'll take it that you enjoyed this huh? thanks a bunch we truly appreciate your reading and commenting..i will be by your page soon..


  • sinfull
    August 19

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    Ppppffftttt

    Where have you been hiding this torrent of word like I've never heard all up in my page like like I'm special . Absurd! hehehe...Damned awesome write you have here. Not a stumble in the whole spew of it. Kudos!


  • Ellis gold member
    July 31

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    Great Rhyming Bonanza -- I Love It

    You are good, but I have a sharp bone to pick clean with you, Mr. Human Person. You wrote:

    "Our cheques are in the mail and the cat’s caught his tail
    Flailing about now ‘cause that rocker won’t let him bail"

    Well, here now, there then, SHAME ON YOU, you Shameful Being. You have insulted the highest and best form of life upon this planet. We don't do this. Stupid humans have no better sense than to design and build something in which to move forward and back WITHOUT GOING ANYWHERE. It is so stupid, we know you have to be embarised about it, and so you try to draw attention away from it by associating cats with it, since it is us of whom you are most jealous due to our superior intelligence and all the other ways in which we are the greatest species on Planet Earth. So there. (You may want to change this.)

    Tiki Cat
    Buy my Tiki's Gourmet Cat Food
    "Too Good For Humans"

  • Great write.

    A message to learn from. Being from an older generation I had to stop and think what some of your words meant to say. I hope you never give up making the world a better place to live in with your encouraging writings. We are all brothers and sisters and should learn to live in peace with one another.

  • sleepinglion
    April 29

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    Fantastic, I don't normally read stuff as long as this but you kept my attention,
    Cheers
    Lion


    • AsIThink gold member
      May 3
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      Thank you very much for the great commenting here. Definately one of our longer ones...but when we start enjoying it so much, THIS is the result. lol. Well, thanks again.

      AsIThink...

    • Swangrnv gold member
      May 3
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      wow

      sorry abouyt the delay in responding! thanks so very much we truly appreciate the time it took you to read, and comment..happy you felt it worth your time..i'll be checking in on your work soon..


  • paulcreates silver member
    April 26

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    Aw you throw'n it down bra'!

    Yo random rhyme rocks AP's raftas;
    cues the mouth music that fades out afta'
    [break it down fo me brotha']
    puh-puh pu-chih!, puh-puh pu-chih!
    LOL
    What a nice diversion. This pale face is smil'n.

    Paul

    • Swangrnv gold member
      May 3
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      l.o.l.

      love the improv! thanks so much we are all very pleased you have apparently enjoyed our style of 'urban brag' and appreciate your comments sir..i'll be checking out your page soon!


  • LadyLavender gold member
    April 23
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    oh my god...FIERCE!

    • Swangrnv gold member
      April 25
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      wow

      what a wonderful comment! i and i'm certain the others on this write, thank you
      so much, and we're pleased you liked this!

  • Michael P gold member
    April 19

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    wow that's a bunch of words=excellent and well placed-fit right with your title.Had to read this a few times there's alot to go over(so much giong on)Yes, a very intelligent write...peace

    • AsIThink gold member
      April 19
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      Thank you very much for the fantastic praise. As my brother mentioned (below me), this was one of those 'release pieces'. Now how is this for "lengthy"??? hahaha. Glad you enjoyed it though.

      AsIThink...

    • Swangrnv gold member
      April 19
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      thank you!

      it's a collaboration between myself and my brothers, but certainly a piece we are very proud of..i know it was lengthy, and full of stuff to say..but that's how it tends to happen when each of us has to get something outof our heads, and on 'virtual' paper! l.o.l. appreciate youyr wonderful compliment sir and will be visiting your page soon..


  • queenie
    March 15

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    now this does my heart good. this is rap, spoken word and spittin rhymes all in one, yet it is in a catergory of its own. this is what the youth to hear, not profanity laced indulgencies. i was truly blown away by this piece so full of creativity and truth.the voice of a true wordsmith is loudly heard. i am awed.

    • AsIThink gold member
      March 15
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      Wow...thanks for the wonderful compliments here. First of all, I'm amazed that you've made it through this book-sized entry (lol). Second of all, I appreciate your powerful feedback and that you thought enough of this to tell us. Gosh, I'm glad you were "blown away by this piece" and hope you didn't injure yourself in the process (just kidding...). I'm awed too at these terrific comments of yours.


      AsIThink...


    • Swangrnv gold member
      March 15
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      THANK YOU

      but that would be 4'wordsmiths' because i'd be remiss not to mention my bros. who also added their special gifts.. we thank you profusely for your wonderful praise..


  • FaeRae gold member
    February 28

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    OK, I am SO not as talented as you are. You said in your bio that your brothers are more talented- so I must say I hope I never meet them because my lexicon is so small that I wouldn't know what to say to them. I hardly know what to say to you, except "Brillian."

    • AsIThink gold member
      February 28
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      I am one of the 'other' brothers (smiling). Swangrnv has a good imagination and is a dedicated, caring soul. Always putting others before himself. We write differently (and sometimes very similarly - depending on the subject matter). Well, you already have 'met' me (haha) and I've read some of your work. I doubt the the size of one's lexicon even holds a candle to the size of one's heart. Based on what I've read already: its huge. PLUS, your frames of reference are from that 'stock' I love so much: Nature...no matter inspiration source (to me).


      AsIThink...

    • Swangrnv gold member
      February 28
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      Funny you...

      should say that, technically you've been introduced to their 'skill' already..this a collaboration with those brothers in question!! l.o.l.
      yeah it's a piece of work that my hand is in, but i'm just a part here the rest is them, who are below my friend Hetha in the comments below. thanks for the great comment and we all truly appreciate it!


  • Hetha gold member
    February 27

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    Wow!

    I do mean Wow! This is one heckuva collab! This is on fire! I love it! Incredible!

    • AsIThink gold member
      February 27
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      Thank you for this wonderfully wordered comment. Happy that you love this and think its on 'fire' . I loved this comment too.

      AsIThink...

    • Swangrnv gold member
      February 27
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      wow

      I MEAN WOW!!! l.o.l. that's a fantastic comment you made! thank you so much my friend we all truly appreciate your reading and leaving such love for us!! thanks again!


  • WiseWithWordz
    February 11
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    damnnnn...

    i don't know what i could do to add to this one! whewww! This is Flaming1


  • lyricist
    January 31

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    hot

    yo this is super live, and you got stupid skillz at rhyming. unreal. i mean got me hype. reading this. uh oh. see, i mean you gon make me bring the heat now man. this poem got me fired up. real talk. the lyrics is just fire. see me and my boys used to sit around and see who write the hottest poems filled with lyrics and metaphor. you first i came across on this AP that does the same thing that i love. so now i gots to bring mine. again this is hot. REAL TALK. see why i made you a favorite?

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 31
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      l.o.l.

      much thanks my friend! the feelings mutual kid, i loved the first piece and each one i've read since, so no doubt you got the goods!! appreciate your words and support my friend..

      BTW, this is actually me and my brothers..

  • OUTSTANDING!!! This is one fantastic collab!!! Its creative way with words and meanings pulls the reader in for more. Its excited, entertaining and makes very sounds points and clear imagery. Ty for this read to you all.

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 22
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      Thank you very much for your amazing and inspiring compliments and comments on this piece. You have written a humbling 'mindfull'; a delight to read. I apologize for my tardiness in responding here to your impacting expressions. It is greatly appreciated for sure.

      AsIThink...

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 14
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      wow!

      I'm flustered by the flattery! thank you, speaking for my bros. you have given very gracious praise and we are very appreciative poetess..

  • Hey, guys, this was totally AMAZING. I loved the rhythm, the internal rhyme and the attitude. You really make a fairly grand exposure here in these lines. The turns of phrase are unique, often surprising. I love the clash of ideals that you write about and the resolution/determination of the end. Great stuff!

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 14
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      Hmmm, now this is ten thousand times the fun for us (haha)! Wow are we pleased with your take on this one. Trust me, we had a ball with this. And so it's no small wonder that your enjoyment of it is so satisfying to me (and I'm quite sure the other writers will echo my remarks). This kind of collaborating that we do on pieces like this, really make the idea of it come to life for me. And this kind of feedback really makes it easy to write on! (haha...

      AsIThink...


  • karma-n-peace
    January 9

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    Whew! Awesome-ly lyrical & a creative masterpiece!
    Your an amazing talent guys~!

    P.S.
    SO looking forward to buying your book!

    Hugz,
    Nicole

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 9
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      Thank you very much for your wonderfully kind comments knickerdew. We're grateful for your visit and reading. So glad that you enjoyed it as you have said.

      AsIThink...

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 9
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      thanks!

      so sweet of you my friend!! great comment and on behalf of the other fellars..WE ARE PLEASED THAT YOU'RE PLEASED!!


  • Itahed
    January 7

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    BRAVO

    "We slice through wind—if you haven't heard"... I have heard and loving it. You guys need to have a live on stage word war... I know i have said this hundreds of times but it bares to be repeated you are amazing!!!!

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 8
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      lol - you have heard? hmmm...who's been spilling the beans? haha. Thank you very much for the wonderful remarks Itahed. You never know, we may have that "live on stage word war" yet (smiling... ). Love your enjoyment of our work.

      AsIThink...


  • Amera gold member
    January 6

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    Wow! You and your Collaborator are very good together. You have always been a great story teller and together your work is beautiful

    Love,
    Amera♥

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 8
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      Thank you very much for the kind words and feedback. We all appreciate it. (Those moves are too bad either...smiling).

      AsIThink...


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 6
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      thanks!

      we are truly blessed by your presence and wonderful comment my friend
      glad that you found this enjoyable..

  • AsIThink gold member
    January 5
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    Well fellas, I think that this collaboration was so fun and filled with energy. Doing this again, made me realize how much I enjoyed our earlier collaborations. Each of these have such a different flavor to them. Thanks for letting me in on this one!

    AsIThink...


  • moluv10
    January 5

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    This piece came out great! I love and greatly treasure all the positive energy we have received from it. Thank you asithink and swangrnv!

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      Ahhh shucks, mo...(haha) - it's the least that we could do to jump on the ride (and then hold on for dear life! LOL). Thanks a million for the invite.

      AsIThink...


  • ennovy silver member
    January 5

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    I see you both are ready for the world....and it takes both wisdom and a clever unique mind to face life as we have in the past, present and future.......excellent write...novy


    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      Swangrnv speaks for me here...thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed it.

      AsIThink...

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 5
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      aaww..

      my friend so sweet your comments..this is a collaborative effort of more than two but trust me, all would be happy just to know you liked this!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    January 5

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    ooh, Ahh..

    I like this flow, it's straight out brilliant, your thoughts weave in the zone, and oh I'm feeling it. Magical words turn into miracles, the verses you spray are straight out lyrical. Another wonderful collaboration, thanks for penning this straight out sensation., Just thought I'd jot my thoughts, so don't mention it, but damn my brother, this here is the spit!

    Peace, poeticweaver~

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5

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      What you just wrote was wonderful actually. Thank you very much for the time you took to write your feedback and definately the time you spent reading from us. It is so humbling. We all thank you sincerely. Wow, goes to show me that one can never really know what will move another, huh? Thank you again poeticweaver.

      AsIThink...


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 5
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      thanks!

      We all appreciate your wonderful comments, and glad it was a good read for you my friend!


  • Draig aine gold member
    January 5

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    oh my friend

    contusions we cause 'em,

    from verbage we tossed 'em

    as we keep singing.. knowledge is king

    from the days of old come rays of new

    you rock!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      Thank you very much for reading this (a bit lengthy) piece. Our appreciation is real and your having enjoyed this is very meaningful to us.

      AsIThink...


  • Cry Wolf
    January 5

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    I can't get over how fantastically written and clever this whole poem is...even though I personally don't understand half of what you guys said I still think it's awesome lol the word play has a strong, raw yet beautifully smooth flow to it, and once I started reading the first line I couldn't help myself from gobbling up the whole thing! This has to be the greatest collabration I have ever read on AP, and I hope you guys are proud of this masterful achievement.

    ~ Ink

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      WOW... You can "Ink" that again...(haha). Your words have truly moved me. Funny enough, this was done at the sparking of our alliteration bandit, "moluv10" (smiling). We have done over 40 or more collaborations, and this was (to me) exciting (kind of funny) and just fun to do honestly. We call it our "Urban Brag" brand of writing. Your remarkable compliments have deeply impacted me. Thank you so much for them. And yes, we are proud of this piece. But even more so, we are grateful for the overwhelming amount of positive energy and feedback that this piece has received from you and our other peers here.

      AsIThink...


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 5
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      wow!

      as a collective i say (4 us! l.o.l.) wow thank you!! we appreciate this wonderful show of support!!


  • Mariana gold member
    January 5

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    Brilliant!!!!!!  A roller-coaster of a ride.
    Bravo to you all!

    Mariana

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      LOL...that's funny. Thank you very much for the reading of this long piece Mariana. We're happy about THAT ride of yours (seems like it was fun...).

      AsIThink...


  • couldbeworse
    January 5

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    incrediable wording. rhyme was excellent and didnt seem forced. fav parts:
    contusions we cause 'em,

    from verbage we tossed 'em

    as we keep singing.. knowledge is king

    from the days of old come rays of new

    and

    Our cheques are in the mail and the cat’s caught his tail
    Flailing about now ‘cause that rocker won’t let him bail
    Frail lyrics don’t phase me—
    It takes a lot to amaze me;
    I laugh to myself at those who’d like to scathe 'we'

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback and compliments. And thanks for quoting back those parts that stuck out for you.

      AsIThink...


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 5
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      thank you!

      You reaction to this piece is incredibly inspiring! speaking for my bros.. thank you!

  • dillpickle62
    January 5
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    WOW!!!

    An amazing write! This is GREAT!

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      Hey! How are you? Great seeing you in this neck of cyber space. LOL. Thank you as always for the feedback.

      AsIThink...

  • poetchile
    January 5
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    that's that shit...brother.

    it felt like i was in a freestyle session w/ a hot new M.C

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      hahaha...Okay - that's hilarious! lol...Thanks for the read sharif; glad that you liked this piece (by the way, this is a 4-person collaboration) .

      AsIThink...


  • DeadBeauty
    January 5

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    I now have new hope in poetry!!

    Wow, can I just say that I had almost given up on finding anything worth reading on here. Good poets and poetry seem to come few and far between, but I'm glad I kept looking.

    This is a piece that I would really love to hear spoken. The flow and vocab are strong and you can't elp but keep readong once you've started.

    I'm definitly going to be reading some more of your work. Wonderful job to all of you

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      "Jeepers!" (smiling) I am certain that this is one of the most fascinatingly flattering comments that I've ever read here. And knowing it is regarding something we've written is incredible. Thank you very much for them. For my part (and I echo what my brother has said just under my comment), I honestly appreciate the compliments.

      AsIThink...

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 5
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      i'm totally..

      AGASP!! at the comment you've given, wow we are all very flattered to
      recieve such an amazing comment!! thankfully you found us, now we found you and that makes for the happier few!! yeah corny i know..anyways thank you so much for a great great comment my friend it's very much appreciated!


  • geckogirl silver member
    January 5
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    this was fantastic you lot, but I need to go back a bit to catch up....

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      Thank you very much for reading this lengthy piece. It was so fun to write to. LOL...Not a problem with you catching up one iota! haha...

      AsIThink...

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 5
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      thank you

      I knew if i tried to find you all i need do is come looking for ya on my page!! l.o.l. thank you sweet one, you support is alway welcome and appreciated!!


  • Angelflower
    January 5

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    you all did such a wonderful job, it all went together so well! the flow and word usage was superb! you guys got talent, which I'm sure many have told ya'll thank much for sharing..

    Angel


  • Desire gold member
    January 4

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    Wow~

    Oh My Word You ALL have brought forth some heat with a beat
    Excellent this is and Love the weaving of words!!
    These lines had me rolling in an Empowered way~

    Frail lyrics don’t phase me—
    It takes a lot to amaze me;
    I laugh to myself at those who’d like to scathe 'we'
    But we’re quick with our wit—off the top shelf
    Word Chiefs,

    Okies where are the autograph books
    So when is the next one
    Woot~
    Thank You All for sharing Your Talents and Voices~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Souls
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 5
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      Wow...these are wonderful sentiments to have expressed. I thank you so much and am sure the other collaborators feel the same. So good to hear; this is excellent. I'm glad I was invited to this by moluv10.

      AsIThink...

  • Stunning wordcraft. the flow and wording of this piece was mind blowing- i felt truly awestruck by the raw, unrescrited poetic flair of this piece. "diabolically decimating, decapitating and dissipating
    kinetically constipating thoughts of participating
    dedicating this one to the wondrous flow
    check the mass destruction as the worderers blow.." was kickass in every sentence and wicked with every word. you guys did a superb job- i think this is one of the best collaborations i've seen yet.


  • edens-envy
    January 4

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    The rhythm to the wording of this is superb. Lol, being the grammar hound I am, when I saw the title I thought it was a typo but upon reading the poem itself saw I love your creation of the word worderer. You are truly a master of the pen!

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 4
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      Wow...such a powerful compliment. Thanks so much for the reading (especially considering the length of it). Really appreciate this and the wonderful things you said here.

      AsIThink...


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 4
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      WOW

      Thank you ever so much my friend, but i can't take solo credit on this..the are other 'masters' in the mist.

  • You're a first degree worderer with an arsenal of farce an' all! Some great stuff here -- nothing contained by the two-syllable prison from which so many would-be writers write. And SURPRISE! Unlike so much of the rap out there, you didn't have to get dirty or profane to bring home a point intelligently and with panache. Thank you for elevating the language with this ambitious write.

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 4
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      overjoyed..

      that you've enjoyed this so much my friend, yes we have a tendancy to talk smack, l.o.l. but never feel it necessary to be profane just because..your comments were awesome and from all of us..i thank you sir!


  • Rheea gold member
    January 4

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    you can not afford to not listen and learn to the elders or to keep going forward you have that all here and said beautifully. Keep to the front of the bus.


    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 4
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      yea yea!

      your advice is sound my friend, from all of us..thank you!

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 4
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      Thank you very much for the compliments. Such wonderful comments Rheea. As I mentioned to a few other commentors, we are still waiting for one more collaborator but this is where we are with this 4-person collaboration. Excellent advice back to us; thank you for it.

      AsIThink...

  • Superb Plus

    Most unique, to say the least. Your verbiage amazes; you're certainly not lazy, but your poem drove me crazy!!!! lol Extremely well written indeed.

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 4
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      Hello Striders20Bar20...it's very good to see you. Although the other collaborators will leave their individual comments, I want to thank you for us all. (Funny enough, we are waiting for one more collaborator...smiling). These are hefty compliments and are so appreciated. Sorry to have driven you crazy though -

      AsIThink...


  • iamlost gold member
    January 4
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    I love the tone of this piece, the fast-paced, catchiness. The meter and rhyme throughout is amazing, and the word choice and phrasing really makes this stand above. I really really enjoyed reading this, and am glad I clicked on a whim.

    Well penned,
    ~lost

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 4
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      Hello iamlost, so glad you found this piece. What wonderful compliments, eh? The 4 of us have written over 30 collaborations together and when we write in this way ("Urban Brag"), it is usual purposefully faced-paced and 'edgy' (going for 'brand naming' so-to-speak...haha) and often laced with humor (though not so-much here). Thank you very much for your impressive comments.

      AsIThink...

  • I love the way everyone let the lines flow so freely, as if not bound or constricted at all...the use of words are masterful...! great piece collab~

    becca

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 4
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      thank you!

      we really appreciate all the sweet and thoughtful comments,and surely
      when they come from gifted writers themselves.

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 4
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      The others will say what they say (smiling). I'm saying: thank you very much for such a great compliment. I'm very happy about how you experienced this piece. It's been a while since we've collaborated on one of our 'Urban Brag' style'd pieces. Glad we kept your attention (since it's so long and wordy...lol).

      AsIThink...


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    January 4

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    what a great collab, everything just flowed like smooth silk
    I learn somethin evryday,

    We mastered the 'verbal parallel bars'
    Loved It !!
    Well done and congrats, very impressive

    • Swangrnv gold member
      January 4
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      thanks

      we always appreciate a comment..yet we appreciate it even more when it's so laced with extra sweet things to say! thanks so much my friend!

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 4
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      Thank you very much for the wonderful comments and compliments. We've done many collaborations together BUT, this was the first in in a long break for us. So, we really appreciate your kindness and visit.

      AsIThink...


  • hotchocolate gold member
    January 4
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    You all did a Great job on this hon! I enjoyed reading

    it’s a hypocrisy not to accept our democracy
    debate our scientology or respect our philosophy
    diabolically decimating, decapitating and dissipating
    kinetically constipating thoughts of participating
    dedicating this one to the wondrous flow
    check the mass destruction as the worderers blow..

    • AsIThink gold member
      January 4
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      Thank you very much for the read and the big compliments. For my part, I'm glad you enjoyed this. These are very fun and energizing to do.

      AsIThink...

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