Oh God
I perceive you, as the real one
yet I outline you, sometimes,
like the glow
sometimes, like the umbrella
in the massive rain
maybe you are, neither the
shine, nor the umbrella
however, it is my second nature
to form your specimen
according to my own necessities
Oh God...
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Author user name is..prabhudayal khattar
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He is there for what we need andy time of the day.
To give a lift, shower wus with blessing ar bless us with His rain. Take away the sorrow, ease the heart through stress. Help us or a friend out of a mess. Even whe our day is fine, He likes to hear"I like my colk calm day...mac
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Interesting
Good us of imagery and diction. The use of the word "sometimes" is repeated, I am sure you could come up with another way to say it so it won't seem repetitious. Other than that, beautiful!
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This is good and reminded me of the passage in the Gita when Krishna reveals himself to Arjuna. Beautifully done.
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This poem reminds me of Pilate when the Christ asks him about truth and he responds: "What is truth?" You sort of make a similar statement here, [I perceive YOU in the image of my own necessity], my paraphrase ...Well said, Poet. Best wishes in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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nice this was very smooth nice and of course deeply penne i admire the message in this good luck in the contest
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