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i, friend

i am here
i won't leave
i am listening

i am near
i am there

i stand in front
i am at your side
i have your back

i am every door
opened

i am
i am here
i won't forget you

i am as forever
i am

I will be
believe me
and read again

I say again~

i am
your friend


Author notes



I hope you like this.

although it may seem stalkerish and repetitive,

the true meaning of the poem only finally, is voiced in the very last line, though in all subsequent thoughts... this is actually said over and over again.

This time I went without punctuation to give it a streaming quality of thought, like morse code in a sense.

I tried to add imagery, but ditched that idea, after a few miserable attempts.

I just wanted this to be simple and as readable as possible, so anyone can take it in and enjoy!

~take care and God Bless, Tandy.

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  • Hello...No.One.Home silver member
    March 12

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    I love the shortness of this, it hits home when you read the last line

    A wonderful write and I wish you all the best in the contest.

    Kate

  • tara wilson gold member
    January 28
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    this is beautiful, i love sparse poetry


  • aanika
    January 28

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    aww, this is a very sweet poem.
    it's kind of short and lacks imagery, so it's not really what I was looking for in this contest, but thank you so much for entering!

  • femurlee
    January 8

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    This is beautiful in it's simplicity -- I've always liked your writing style I didn't get any unnaturally fond undertones from this either -- just sheer brotherly-endearments. Peace.

  • Rudy Ignatius
    January 5

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    I didn't get stalkerish vibes from "i, friend" at all. I think it is a nice thought to have someone near and to be thinking of you at every waking moment. This is a lovely poem from an even lovelier soul. Some things are meant to be simple because they were never anything but simple. Ironically, I find this piece reminiscent of an age-old song that has always been a favorite of mine: "Do Not Stand at My Grave and Weep." The overtones of that poem compare greatly to this, in both simplicity and that ever-present aura of love.

    I bid you much luck in the contest!

    Always,
    Brit

    P.S. My holiday season was spectacular! (But I'm still celebrating as my best friend's birthday is two days away and mine is just a week after hers.)

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