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When We Use To Dream


We finger-painted
with our toes,
colored outside the lines,
rolling in the laughter
of spring grass
as we dreamed of who

we would someday be;

never realizing
boxes had walls
where dreams got trapped
and paint faded away.

 

 

 

Author notes

Okay I owe credit for the border but can't get it to show at the moment. I am sorry and well get it there asap!

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  • Stormy Days
    February 1

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    i like the background the poem is cute full of love and laughter the ending is a bit sad congrats on the trophy you deserved it wonderful write


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    January 16

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    This is so beautiful, I am a dreamer too, it has all sorts of flaws being such. So beautifully drawn with your words, leaving me with a soft sigh. Best to you in the contest


  • Lady Michaella
    January 15

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    um.... WOW!! this really pwns mine
    this is an excellent poem. so dark and meaningful. i love the 'boxes had walls where dreams got trapped and paint faded away' its genius. someday i hope 2 write free verse like this... good luck this is amazing.
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