Red lips, made up face
Red stilettos, hearts that race
Walk the other way
Author notes
Shadow Life
A contest entry
- Haiku by Kathraina.
900 points, ended January 5, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Love it. Sounds like a lovley lady in the red light district.
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So....
You are one of those Haiku/Senryu Traditional rule breakers!
This makes me think of a street walker of course & the last line is clever in that it could be an admonition to someone who's tempted to indulge or it could also mean that the pros are walking in the way they shouldn't! 
Good take on the Shadow Life! 
My understanding of Haiku/Senryu/Bible-ku is that you're not to use Caps or punctuation.
I sometimes break the rules also! If I'm writing about The Creator I always cap [of course]! Seldom do I chose to write in a way that needs punctuation however as I find it much more challenging & that's what I like about Haiku style! Nice work. 
Oh...the other thing about Haiku....you're not supposed to rhyme! 
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HAY, all primped up.. Walk MY way. hehe
I love it
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very well crafted
you've painted such a vivid mental imagery. thanks for sharing this
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Well written.
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you said it. walk the other way now and no tears later
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Bravo on this piece! I can just see the imagery behind it
♥ Kathraina
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