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My Novocain

So turn up the volume
To block out the pain.
Let the music hit you.
It's your own novocain.
Tune out the world
Forget all the hurt.
Your arms wrapped around you
Hands clung to your shirt.
The beat fills your body
The sound moves your soul
Nothing better to hear
Than your modern rock n' roll.

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  • Mrs.Shadow
    January 14, 2009
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    i like it..music is freedom..me nd u both no that huh??


  • Firequeen
    January 4, 2009

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    I like this just the way it is.
    Its short yet it spoke volumes to me
    Music can sometimes be the pulse of our life.
    I really enjoyed this read.
    Fire