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Sub Consciousness Takes Control

Time, my ever hateful foe, and friend.
Restless nights I stay awake; unstable,
trying to fall asleep, I can not succumb.
The temptation, beckoning me to come forth.
I stand on edge, my eyes set afire, burning.
My sub consciousness takes control.
I fear I can not tell the difference,
what is real and yet, what is not.
Looking up to heavens light, I pray to God;
and curse his name all the same.
This burden, this disease,
Insomnia. . .

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Prompt- B. #2,http://prince0gotham.deviantart.com/art/Insomnia-106621242 #3.
~ Time
~ Conscious
~ Unstable
~ Edgy
~ Succumb

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  • SurvivalLiesWithin
    January 5
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    I think that was a good way of describing hateful insomnia =)


  • ZachP silver member
    January 4

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    Sometimes, Insomnia is quite the blessing, lol, as long as you're productive . . . but when you're like me, watching the Hallmark channel, and eating expensive swiss chocolate, then not so much.

    But I definately see the other side of this, regardless of my ill-timed humour. And this is an amazingly descriptive poem that cuts to the heart of it.

    Good luck.
    Z


  • Angelflower
    January 4

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    Sounds like me, and I don't work grave shift. lol. 2 days of sleep and the rest is like a midget on a 12 pack of Monster... Everything drags on.. I really liked this write hun. Best of luck in the contest.

    Angel


  • Bosiarbooger gold member
    January 4

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    sweet

    Great take on the problem I've had since I was two. About 3.5 hours a night and not all at the same time, though it gives me time to write. But it takes a toll just today I almost got hit by a car not paying attention thank god for friends. Best of luck to you in the contest and getting to sleep, Boog


  • roninwort
    January 3

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    So true...

    "My sub consciousness takes control.
    I fear I can not tell the difference,
    what is real and yet, what is not."

    I understand this so well... its hard to tell where a dream ends and reality begins. Amazing poem, well done. Thank you for the entry and good luck!

    Ronin


    • Ademon
      January 4
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      Thanks man, I work grave shift, and somtimes when i try to sleep during the day I can't, and like right now i'm going on 48 hours and maybe like 2 hours of sleep... So, I really enjoyed this prompt! Good luck in judging, there are a lot of excellent writers on this site!

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