.
your experience-frame is
not the same colour as
mine; I wonder if
the magic is similar
if you were malleable, I
think I'd fold you into
a pair of wings; flightless
without imagination
and innocence, the essence
of your corseted maturity
I'd watch you fly; past
the second-star-to-the-right
and long after morning
slipped past in that imitation
red. and I'd smile, knowing
mismatched eyes weren't
so different after all
.
Author notes
I would love to be a part of your family... the role of a much-loved cousin springs to mind as something that I could fit ... close enough to look out for you, but not close enough to tread on the toes of others.
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Comments
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i really like this. its put together really well
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Oh my god. This is beautiful!
You managed to mould me into a faerie, let me fly and send me home to Neverland!
I am in awe of your words here, and your gentle generous spirit!
No toe stepping here love. Only smiles.
Shari
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That is how family can be especially cousins...well written.
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You defy the trendy long titles!
"experience-frame"
Great hyphenated phrase...it's very cool; it makes me think of how the picture inside the frame (which is never mentioned if there is one...interesting) would be more detailed in time, or not.
"I wonder if
the magic is similar?"
That question mark was really jarring to me...I didn't remember seeing it earlier; I think it'd better w/o it. Otherwise, that was divine as hell because it remains unanswered, but thoughtful.
"long after morning
slipped past in that imitation
red"
That's hawt.
"mismatched eyes"
That kicks more ass than you could believe.
The quest for purple shoelaces continues.
;
Jessica
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