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In Memory of a Soul

I've seen the world crumble
Underneath your feet,
I've seen you at your highs and lows,
Through sunshine, rain and sleet.

You've never been the same
Since you heard the tragic news,
A life that once sounded Pop and Rock
Now only plays somber blues.

I want to pull you from the ground,
And turn you back the same,
As when you were before she died,
Before your mom's death came.

But how to do it! I just don't know
What help that I can give.
How can I turn a life that's broken
To one that's worthy to live?

We're just not on the same page anymore.
No longer friend to friend.
It's like the friendship that we've forged
Died with your mother's end.

You've taken on some habits
That I wish you didn't take,
Those marks that run far down you arm
Only razor blades make.

If the old you could see yourself right now,
I wonder what she'd say.
But I highly doubt a dose of guilt
Would take your pain away.

I'm feeling very selfish,
Wanting you to go back to how you were.
Wanting back my friend
Who now only knows her hurt.

You may think things are fine between us,
That nothing strange is going on.
But I can feel our "strong" bond straining,
That our friendship's almost gone.

Oh please, just try to keep it together!
Try to put out the fire lit.
I don't think our friendship
Can take another hit.

I suppose that now I'll say goodbye,
I know there's nothing you can do.
Once your ready for selfish me,
I think I'll be ready for broken you.

With all apologies to my dearest friend,
Who's seen more hardship than I hope I ever witness.

Author notes

This one felt good to write. It's a message, you might say, to one of my best friends in the world for many years. I feel very selfish, wanting my best friend back, even through her loss, but I hope you can see where I might feel like this through my poem. It is in memory to her spirit, which, I fear, may have died along with her mother. I'm very sorry for her, who life has never been fair to. I don't think I'll ever show her this poem, though--I'm not sure she'd be able to take my grief for her along with all of the other pressures of her very difficult life.

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  • rokouttilur80
    August 11
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    Very good

    Just wish I though of it first. Wow. Dont forget to favorite me. Sometimes I wish we could show her these poems uk?


  • Thendestinystruck
    January 5
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    Stunning.

    i am speechless.


  • Kathraina silver member
    January 3

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    This is so sad, I can feel the pain behind it. This really hits home for me too. I wish you the best, and I hope you can gain the old friend back.

    This piece is fantastic. The rhyme is superb and it flows really really well. Great job and good luck in the contest, you have a good chance of winning

    ♥ Kathraina

    +thanks for sharing

    • Leiko-chamma
      January 4
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      Thanks. I hope I can get her back, too. If she's still there, I mean. I don't really know who she is anymore, but I still try to be as supportive as I can, even if this new her is almost a stranger.