Don't yet have a face,
Nor a name.
In any case,
I pray for you.
I know what I seek,
And you are so hard to find.
I do not know you,
But, oh how I need you.
There is no need to hide,
I only wish to be by your side.
To know you, love you,
And grow old with you.
I am ready for true love,
The kind only you can give me.
To treat each other right,
I'm now in sight.
A contest entry
- January New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended February 8, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is my first peom, hope you like it.
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Very good first poem.
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This is very well penned; the honesty and hope flows down the page in good imagery and emotions
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~Manda
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Very VERY emotional and has a truly great subject to write about and such intresting write i have to say 10 out of 10 wow!!! and maybe you can enter my contest if you want to
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This is a very sweet and heartfelt poem. I really do hope that you find this person this year
The rhythm is a bit off in spots, but the sentiment is definitely there. Well done, and a very happy new year to you!
Laura
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welcome to allpoetry
this is a great poem,I loved the whole nature of it and the flow was good as well. You need to put the option number in the "any notes" section when you click the edit poem page.if you need anyhelp with doing this just let me know I'll help.
thanks for entering the contest and keep up the writing!
cheers
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering the contest
This piece feels forced to me. It seems to have a good, sweet meaning, but the rhyme is forced.
Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering our contest
However, to qualify for placement, you need to include your option choice in your authors notes.
I hope that you enjoy the site, and if you have any questions please don't hesitate to ask
Good luck!
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An intresting write. I did find that there was some forced ryhming in some parts and I also noticed that you have not added the option number in your Author Notes. Sometimes people can get DQ'd for not having that there. Thanks for sharing, best of luck in the contest.
Sarah
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"You yet have a face" -- I think this line misses a "don't".
Being available to others and to the unknown is a pretty big decision to make. I think the last line had the most impact.
Please put your option number in your AN
Thanks for your entry and good luck
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"Don't yet have a face" ... I like it. Thanks!
The last 2 lines were last minute add ons that just came to me.
How do I go back to put a option number in my AN?
Ok- question... in the second stanza, keep it as is or swich lines 1 & 2 with lines 3 & 4. Suggestions?
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If you want to make changes to your poem and/or author notes, click the edit button on the right column with the owner options. Just change them to what you like, then click edit and you're done.
Now you mention it, I think it would flow better if you switched; however, I didn't notice anything "wrong", as a first-time reader.
Hope that helps
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