for what should I have wings
with no where that I should fly
when a heart is filled with tears
and drowning out the sky
for wings they break so easily
and I shall still fall down
each day a constant battle
wearing thorns or just a crown
for storms they cover all around
no safe harbor shall I find
and should I sail these stormy seas
searching for the silver lined
for I will choose this path I take
stand and fall right here
getting back what I put in
working for dreams and facing fear
for who needs wings, water or sky
when I have solid ground
when I can raise my head and stand
stronger this time round
By: Lena Weber
~PurpleSky~
12/11/2008
Author notes
a revised and better version of an older poem that use to consist of only half of what is written here 
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Strong and emotional, like the message of this piece! Well written, thank you for your entry Best wishes.
Evershine -
Wow this was really nice. I love this line "when a heart is filled with tears
and drowning out the sky" Wow amazing.
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This was a fantastic entry and I really do appreciate it. The words written are so... inspirational and beautiful. Thank you, really for entering and I'm sorry for the misunderstanding. Good luck in the other contest.
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I feel like you are talking about an angel as being fragile as much as the human body or about death and how it will feel if you do not have wings.
or it was a dream too. so much is said in this poem that is just one conclusion there are many ideas in this poem you want to be strong and have wings too.
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Wonderful poem, very well written! I usually don't like rhymes, but this is just written so well.
for I will choose this path I take
stand and fall right here
getting back what I put in
working for dreams and facing fear
This is my favourite stanza, but I really like the whole poem.
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I absolutely love this poem! Especially the first two stanzas! very beautifully written the imagery and metaphors are just outstanding!
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"wings they break so easily
and I shall still fall down
each day a constant battle
wearing thorns or just a crown"
You have some beautiful imagery here, but the whole poem came off as awkward to me. I think you should give it a good once-over...Maybe read it outloud to yourself?
The rhyming seems forced and I don't think people normally speak that way...
_Cheers
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You have penned a very uplifting poem. We usually get back what we put into our life and faith. This was a delight to read. Nice rhyme and flow. Great to see you writing again. Take care.
Peace and Grace,
Sandy
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I echo the words of my father, and I'm pleased to see you here once again my auntie Lena!
I'm hardly ever online here, but know you are being thought of.
Timothy Jr. aka poeticpieces.
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Excellent write here
We often try to change who we are in the growing up process only to find our soul becomes weighted down with such sorrows for the angel we left behind still wears our wings .Never leave the angel within behind she or he is your truest friend and will help you be loved and joyfull if you never let her or him go .We are each unique in ourselves and only we the body and the inner friend will fly together .Be not another for the other has no soul to guide you be yuourself and always see the beauty about you .
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Nice to see you writing again and being active on the site. I like the poem. Though it despairs at the beginning, the end offers hope.
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Beautiful!
Beautifully composed PurpleSky. Your 'Strength' of verbiage is shown delicately and sweetly in this lovely poem. You gave it wings if I do say so myself. Avril
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Bravo!
A wonderfully inscribed here my dear sis, how your words have been so missed, what a treat always when you share here my dear sis. I love ya, and don't ya forget it!
Peace, your brother, Timothy aka poeticweaver~ "Excellent Work Here!"
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