I have seen,
Hot and cold,
New and old,
Love and hate,
Friends and mate,
Poverty, hunger,
Beauty, lust
Money, wine,
Faith and trust,
Sorrows, anguish,
Undefined,
Pleasure, laughter
Pain, disaster,
Misfortune,
All were mine.
I have seen,
from North to South,
from East to West,
From man to man,
From pole to pole
Of this old lady,
World, we call.
Its Every mystery,
Every tale,
Of Cuckoo, skylark,
Nightingale,
Of Every flower every bird,
I have seen though,
All the world,
Stars and sky,
By and by,
Songs of love and nursery rhymes,
Ballads, symphonies, holy hymns.
Nothing more I need to see,
Nothing else is left behind.
Ah! But one, I haven’t seen,
The only mystery, undefined,
No living being has seen so far,
And no one wish to see as yet,
but there is no escape,
If you agree, it’s Death.
The most exotic scream,
Is there something even worse,
Exceeding all extremes?
Yes it is a life,
A life without love.
A life without any direction.
What is this thing,
Called true love?
Is it a story or fiction?
Is it a diamond ring?
Nay! It’s love; it’s not a girl,
Yet you’ll have no fear,
To lose the heavenly Pearl.
It’s constant all the way.
It’s free of space and time,
No one has yet defined it though,
Not even Einstein.
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A lot of thought in this piece but when you write
"Nothing more I need to see,
Nothing else is left behind."
I feel sad.
To paraphrase someone
Every day, in every way, I discover something.
Defer "death, the most exotic scream" for a lot longer my friend.
Jim
PS
On this line
"Is there something even worst,"
I think you meant "worse"
Jim
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Thanks dear Jim for your comments and for the correction.
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Once a thing is defined, isn't it then altered and limited? Perhaps a rhetorical question...I enjoy the purety of the poetry Ahkam, and I can feel that you have glimpsed death up close. And love?Love will come in its own time, just as death does...Peace always, Rhonda
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most wonderful
My dearest ahkam..this one wonderful piece...i truly love it. U are master urself. However theres one line I am not very fond of "The most unwanted stuff". Probably the poem is better off without tht one. But this your poem, your feelings and expression..so there. This poem contains many elements of life blended into emotions...the ending is powerful one, Love. One subject that remains mystery like death. perhaps that is why they say love is as strong as death. most outstanding poem, i love it..ahkam, just as i always love you....
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ahkam, i did't say tht the particular line is incorrect...and u deleted it? oh..do i matter tht much to you?
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want to tell you..that i love you...and i miss you..thank you for counting me so worthy...
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Life is a mixture of everything you wrote of in your poem, but you are never alone. Nature is with you at all times, in all places you may go, without your express permission. So, you can never be alone. I like your poem, it is deep and provides food for thought, even though i may disagree with its content.
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Thanks for your nice words Rbruce
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so nice words
you have seen many but have not seen even more than what you have seen, its not only death but a lot of other events waiting for their tern and time.very nice poem sir
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I like it!
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the rhyme of the poem is amazing and not once does it feel forced and i tghink this is a truly great poem with such great flowing verse, well done
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This is the best poem I have ever read on here, poet of the year not week or month, this is amazing and you should get this published, take care Kathrin xx -
Cleverly written....and delightful to read...though perhaps for some controversial...
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very interesting... *nods*
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Not sure i agree, but made me think.
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Is there something even worst,
Exceeding all extremes?
Yes it is a life,
A life without love.
Wow such harsh but very true words...It is the worst worse than death i do think, because we all expect death which is very scary to many...but we all are deserving of love but mnay of us don't expect it especially after some time has elapsed (32 years for me...blah) and that my friend is even scarier. The great thing about this poem is that you show you are a man that has seen many things big and small but have never seen this thing called true love....wow kudos!!!!!
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Very Nice. I liked all the opposites.
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nice flow...
Hi Ahkam, I enjoyed the flow and agree with Mirabelle that you could tidy it up. The message was cool, I gathered that you have seen many things but not death and is ithere something worse - yes a life without love - great theme, keep at it! -
I love the way you've comapared: Love and hate, beauty lust, etc.
You're a fabulous poet...
Just keep the poem a little tidier.
That's exactly what i feel.... No-one else understands, do they?
I wouldn't change your thoughts!
I simply love the creative, un-simple, and very sad poem...
You're a great poet, try your best to strive for more!
Keep it up!
Keep trying!
Maybe try a poem about the rain...
I'm starting a contest soon, why don't you try it soon?
It's going to be great...
Also, have a happy newyear!
Even though i won't...
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Really outstanding, although i can't understand much of your toughts but it is superb. Happy New Year Sir,
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Ah, 'tis a fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme were just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
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but when we dream alone we drem in consort
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very sweet poem dear Ahkam.. nicely written , happy new year 2009.
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An interesting perspective. You've put a lot of thought into writing this. I give you the applause not because I necessarily agree with your message, but because of the effort you put forth and the ability to convey your thoughts in such a way.
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This is beautifully written.Maes the reader feel as if theybare right there with you great job.You should try to enter this in a contest.
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