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Smells Like Adult Spirit

 

 

 

Can I keep pressing repeat in my head-

 

 "You'll see me through,"?

 

 

        Let me know

 

if it's too soon to bathe-

 

 

 how much more shit am I in for?

 

 

      Good God, is it,

 

"When the enemy comes in like a flood,..."

 

or

 

 

"When the enemy comes in, like a flood

the Spirit of the Lord will raise a standard

        against him."?

 

 

    I'm curious,

cause my foundations seem soggy,

   there's no rhyme to it,

 

and I'm not fighting back...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • trekkergirl
    January 17
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    okay it may just be me but this one didn't make much sense to me... was it a conversation or just a few words thrown together? Hummm....

    anyway, thanks for sharing this with us... I may not understand it...but that doesn't make it bad. It could just be way beyond me.

    And thanks for entering this into my contest.