Failing to sleep, I must get up again
I remember those wondrous times when
Sleeping wasn't a battle to win
Peace was something I had within
Now I'm awake for hours it seems
Deprived of sleep, deprived of dreams
But I have one last joy, one last relief
Music still soothes my insomnia grief
I can stay up and play for hours on end
But must stop the minute sleep tries to descend
When I am well-rested, I just have no muse
All the ideas I get, I quickly lose
This predicament gives me the utmost despair
My situation just doesn't seem fair
I need music and sleep, I just can't decide
To do either, the other has to subside
When I sleep it's restful, it brings my life back
But the music's amazing, something I can't lack
I wish so much to have both at one time
But the impossibility is far to sublime
I guess I'll just have to adjust to the switch
Learn when to choose one, when I need which
For sleep is something that I can't replace
And music, alone, is it's own type of grace.
Author notes
I obviously used option 4:Insomniac Musician. Thanks for the good inspiration. 
I know this kind of sucks, but bear with me... I haven't written a contest entry in a long time, I'm out of practice.
A contest entry
- 4 Options (PW allowed) by Rhythm Child.
400 points, ended January 18, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I agree with your sentiment that "Music alone is its own type of grace". I play guitar, and write poetry, and am presently trying to set one of mine to music. This made me smile, as I do not yet suffer with insomnia, but I fear that it may happen at some point.
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Loved it!
This poem reminded me of me...! I can usually be found at 3:00 A.M. too exhausted to sleep, so I am sitting, playing my guitar & writing a song. I know I need to sleep, but when I am tired I am my most creative... I found this poem awesome, nice rhyme, good flow....DeeDee
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Thanks for your comment! Yeah, this was originally for a contest, but I relate to it too. I'm not an insomniac by force, it's rather a chosen lifestyle. when there's no school, it's easy to find me up at 3 or 4 sometimes. I'm a hopeless night owl. lol. Thanks again for your comments!
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I like the poem. I used to have a ton of trouble sleeping, but it was in those hours that many of my poems ideas came to me (possibly selections like "An Ode to Indoor Plumbing" ) When I thought of an idea I'd want to go and take the time to write the poem, but that would mean saying "no" to sleeping for a while. At times I used to think that if I ever starting sleeping better my writing days would be over, but thankfully that was not the case.
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I think I like this one slightly more than the other one I reviewed tonight... though that one wasn't bad at all. I like the concept of a narrator with their body at odds with their creative mind. There are a couple lines that don't quite work on a rhyming level: "something I can't lack". It rhymes, but it's a little reachy in terms of the naturalness of the phrasing. The rhythm is pretty great throughout though.
I like the ending too
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Thank you for both of your comments! I've been practicing rhyming, but still am not close to where I want to be. It's just encouraging to know that there are people in the world that still write (and appreciate) rhyming poetry. Thanks again!
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This is really good, you have agreat sense of rhythm in your poetry, itsort of waltsez around my head, this is really cleverly put together
thanks
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As a musician i relate to this...
I just finished a gig in Manhattan ...a place called ...
the living room..........
This articulate piece shows that being creative leaves no time for sleep....as soon a i lay me down my mind races to changing something or adding something and I get up again.
It' is a blessing and a curse.
Your sophistication is beyond your years lass.
Your life will be filled with joy if you keep your art close.
This was just so true and so excellent...well....im just glad we meet...
i will definitely read more.
Blessings little gypsy,
Lowell Poe.
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Thank you so much for the comment! It's well appreciated. I, too, look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks again!
--Victoria
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Thankyou for the entry
keep writing
Rhythm Child
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hehe. i get like this with depression, poetry, and personal relationships. my best poems are when i'm sad, my best friendships are when i'm happy. such is life.
aaaanyway, comment is about poem! yes! *ahem*
i like how you present the problem in the first stanza, and develop both sides of the debate in the next two, but manage to bring it to a graceful conclusion with the last couplet. -
i very much enjoyed this.. it really felt good hearing it, it put a smile on my face on how much you relate your love to your weakness.
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i couldnt live without music.
i like the idea in this.
i think it works that way for poetry for me. the poems ive written and actually liked were all conceived at some unseemly hour of the night.
i feel like making a contest now. but i dont know what to make it about.
hm.
we shall see.
anyways. sorry i just got off topic.
yeah. poem = excellent.
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im so glad you made the effort
thankyou very much for your entry
have fun
message me for absolutely anything
take care
rhythm child
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