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Here It Comes

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

this isn’t about love.  no, love slipped into another
poem down the hallway.

it’s about a woman wanting her panties pulled down
by someone who is questionable, desirable, insatiable -

pay attention.

she wants the headboard-banging, deep pump-humping,
more than she wants food or water or a membership to Curves

does she want her ass spanked?  hell, yes.  does she care
if you rip off buttons or mess up her pretty hair? hell, no.

she doesn’t want to write poetry about what you do to her in bed -
she wants to dig her heart out from the mattress

she wants to push you away because her lungs are burning
and she can’t breathe worth a good goddamn

so move!

this isn’t a big secret.  it is nothing new.  it just needs to be
stated every once in a while - you know, so you don’t forget.

 

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  • Beautiful Sin-
    September 28

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    Oh beautiful!
    I love:
    she wants the headboard-banging, deep pump-humping,
    more than she wants food or water or a membership to Curves

    does she want her ass spanked? hell, yes. does she care
    if you rip off buttons or mess up her pretty hair? hell, no.


    -Sorry, but it made me laugh [not sure if that was what you were going for.]

    Bravo!

    [as usual]


  • Rhiannon-Rose
    June 23
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    This made me laugh out loud. Its so real though, well done.


  • Matt E. Smith
    March 27

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    Okay, I laughed out loud. When I opened this I wasn't expecting to read that. Makes sense. I'm smiling. I loved it. Not much else I can say except any man you are with needs to step up.


  • Gypsy Via Orleans
    February 7

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    baby i am scared of you. you know how to do the damn thing. i feel sorry for the man who thinks he can handle you.he better take a course in real sex first. you my dear are an awesome writer.


  • Cannonsfire
    January 23

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    And if only all the men below knew how frustrating it was to feel this way and know there is no one up to the task


  • rhondasail
    January 22

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    ...this one...this one is...deep and shallow and real all at once...this is what I wish I could write...but am too scared or inhibited or something...Love your courage and sass, Lane...marvelous!...Rhonda


  • thepoetssoul
    January 19

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    I knew this was a keeper
    Congradulations on the bronze.

    Tony


  • Ithica silver member
    January 17

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    "She wants to dig her heart out from the mattress" That pretty much sums it up for me!!! Good times you naughty li'l thang...


  • Balldinger silver member
    January 12
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    Precisely Penetrable...

    suffocation without the expense. this appears to be an undergarment entanglement of sexual prowess; movement of a justifiable fuzz mussing; a simple request for poetic inspiration all wrapped into unforgettable jaunt of what's to come. who can keep their lips sealed now?


  • JinSays gold member
    January 12

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    and I thought I was keeping it on the hush hush.

    Kidding.
    No really.
    Love,
    jin

    PS- this should be an anthem.


  • michellemybelle gold member
    January 11
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    AMEN!!!

    Love that you said this...but guys...sometimes we want our ass kissed too!

  • justherealone
    January 9

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    I knew that was what women want!!! (Hey, only joking). Go girl! Seriously tho, great write here. Will definitely be reading more of your work!

    Dan.

  • silverfish
    January 8
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    now i know what thirty seconds feels like. -omgfish


  • untitled.
    January 8

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    Love this. In your face, powerful, and not giving a damn about the flowers. A refreshing read, not too many like this out there. Then again, I haven't really looked. So congratulations on impressing me. And possibly turning me on. Kidding. Ish.



    Anywho, brilliant write. I will now commence in reading more of your work.

    A happy shadow,

    ~S.


  • PurpleSky
    January 8

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    ummmm not what I was expecting lol. I am thinking this is at the top because it was maybe most featured or something? anyways on to the write while there is nothing poetic about this lol it says what some of us feel once in awhile and shows raw emotion and gets right to the point so bravo for you and good job!


    • Dalaney gold member
      January 8
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      First of all, thank you for the read. No, it wasn't featured, and no, it wasn't really meant to be poetic....more of a prose thing....eh, not really even prose I just wrote it and viola...this is what came from a thought. Again, thank you for reading. Lane


  • Cup-a-Joe
    January 7
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    ~she wants the headboard-banging, deep pump-humping,
    more than she wants food or water or a membership to Curves~
    Can I copywrite that?
    Joe


  • PerVirtuous
    January 7
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    I don't know about anyone else, but I am offended by being looked at as just a piece of meat! Why are women like that? I am looking for warmth, beauty, security, devotion and all women want is animalistic urges. I have a brain, too! I am more than just a hunk of flesh. Having said this, I'd probably get over it about three seconds in and forget I ever thought it.

  • momentum
    January 6

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    this is so fucking sexy -- i want to write like this, and wish i had written this....

    i love your voice, Lane



  • Whoochi gold member
    January 6

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    Raw, energetic Totally My Dalaney-style. Love it. Everyone needs a reminder and here it is full on! Excellent! Have missed you! Made my heart pound and palms sweat!


  • sheltered
    January 6

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    "here it come"... and did it ever
    like sex vented from a fiery furnace
    i found me a match
    and i'm feeling light headed
    hello for splinters and rug burn

  • strangerforeigner
    January 6
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    this just made me smile. sometimes we all just want a good fuck, i think.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    January 6

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    sex 101

    Professer Lane, Room 69 in Undress Hall @ 9AM
    Class limit everyone on AP.
    Doors locked @ 9:05 AM

  • thepoetssoul
    January 5
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    Did I love this poem hell yes I love this poem.
    Absolutely 100% sexaully motivating, I want to go and spank some ass right now.
    Thanks for reminding me I wont soon forget this poem.
    Thanks for sharing your beautiful talent.

    Tony

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    January 5
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    .


  • badnovocaine
    January 5

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    OH WOW!!!!!
    Nice poem
    This woke me up with a dose of word coffee in the morning. Not what I was expecting. A bunch of caffenated words jumping out at me from every which direction.

    This is good, and as always another masterpiece of
    art.


  • IronMaiden1236
    January 5
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    LMFAO!!!!

    I am paying ATTENTION!!!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 5

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    Absolutely freakin right!!! You said it Lane... know this feeling well


  • forty-one
    January 5

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    Just shut up, and enjoy it

    Was this an exceptional poem? Hell yes! I knew it would be just from the opening lines:

    "this isn’t about love. no, love slipped into another
    poem down the hallway.".

    Talk about making someone feel your words... I seriously have to bite my tongue! My number 1 has floored me again.

    41


  • divebar
    January 5

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    this is.. you are... this is...
    fuck it! im not gonna be able to be all flowery and tell you how great it is. so take the fucking clappies. and revel in my speechlessness.


  • Sesheta
    January 5

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    Ah ha...

    How do I react? Let me count the ways...

    1)...love slipped into another poem down the hallway...
    2) ...pay attention...
    3) hell, yes...hell, no...
    4) ...it just needs to be stated every once in a while - you know, so you don’t forget...

    You always find a new way to incite response from us. You'd think our capacity for it or your computer's ability to handle such ecstasy would falter, but no! My heart's liable to give out first! (Awesome!)




  • A60sMan
    January 5
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    All those raging female hormones ...

    ... You've left me in a cold sweat. You bad girl! LOL


  • whits end silver member
    January 5
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    Holy Sh#t!!

    Totally taking me by surprise with this piece and I'm loving it strong!


  • Angelflower
    January 5

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    lol. I think that you have spoken every woman's mind and hearts desire with this write.. a wonderfully sexually charged write one that I think all men should read


    Angel


  • gllarso
    January 5

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    HOT!!!

    I love it!!! This is very hot and descriptive you leave no doubt as to what is expected in this poem! I am going to need a cold shower now...

    -Garrett


  • Malabu
    January 5

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    damn where are you when i need you...and to think i need you every day...ill even let you spank me!

    ok... now you got me all excited damn you woman

    mal


  • Zeus the Woman
    January 5

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    Oh wow. This is just intense. It made me sweat just reading it. It's winter. Why am I sweating? You're good. Haha. It's funny how often people feel the way you describe in the poem. Is it really love we're after half the time?

  • eyelids shut
    January 4
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    I think you know what my verdict is.

    Fucking great.


  • usefuldistraction
    January 4
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    I was um looking for the room down the hall, and um..well...yeah...I'll take this one!


  • nordicsky silver member
    January 4

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    Pay attention? How could I possibly not pay attention when you write like this?

    “she wants the headboard-banging, deep pump-humping,
    more than she wants food or water or a membership to Curves”

    This is sexy, urgent, and unrestrained writing and I love every word of it.

    Love, Peter


  • Jersene gold member
    January 4

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    Damn....this is great, and let's not forget so true. You write more than poetry; you write life, honest and raw. Excellent Lane


  • HaleyMary
    January 4

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    You always write such a amazing poems, Lane. Very raw imagery and emotion, lots of passion, as well. Thanks for sharing your talent and best of luck in the contest.


  • BehindTheShadow
    January 4
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    and forget we won't...


  • marc creamore
    January 4

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    OMG!!! You continue to astound Lanie . . . This is so god damn raw and honest . . . You have a voice that is so easy to embrace, to relate to internally . . . If you don't get that book published soon I'm gonna have to print off all your work on this site and put it in a binder to carry with me in my black poetry bag . . . I am beginning to want to have your words with me at all times to remind me of how bloody brilliant you are!!!!!!!!

    your fan in the North Country,
    Marc

  • Rowan gold member
    January 4

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    hell yeah...
    "she doesn’t want to write poetry about what you do to her in bed -
    she wants to dig her heart out from the mattress"

    shite, wish I'd written that.

    damn fine work.


  • afroqban
    January 4

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    my mind is blown!! you out did yourself here. very raw, blunt, non-boring piece that I love seeing from you. hey, u got my tongue out here mami. great job


  • tomisb
    January 4

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    It is a gift to admit to the truth of this. It is a wonder to share it so well that people to agree to admit to the truth of this. It is a miracle when two people can be open and free enough with each other to let it happen without any sense of shame.

    Love, Tom B.


  • Emmyb gold member
    January 4

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    Hahaha. This made me laugh. Reminds me of the sort of passion I found when I first met my fiancee! - yes they do need reminding after time! they do forget...

    Very good


  • Cup-a-Joe
    January 4
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    Harvey,

    ~she wants to dig her heart out from the mattress~
    Damm Lane.
    Joe


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    January 4

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    Mmmmmm

    Loved it and you are naughty!!!!

    Love
    Sue

  • Just a poet gold member
    January 4

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    Isn't about love?
    I'm not so sure, love isn't just flowery romance (well it is in most of my poetry ...) love is about meeting each others needs. And sometimes, thank goodness, our needs are for open and honest lust, hard, fast, passionate, devil-may-care sex. For physicality not flowers, for friction not fantasy. Hell let's not beat about the bush; sometimes you just wanna FUCK!



  • sheltered
    January 4
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    laughing me effin arse off
    and I know she will love this
    seems like you understand our
    dearest Cinnarry
    we do
    she is a charm
    as we are bracelets platelets


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    January 4
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    Okay, okay already. Sheesh, let a girl get her boots off and put the shopping down first...


  • arafura gold member
    January 4
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    True words...


  • geckogirl silver member
    January 4

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    Damn Girl this is grouse!!! It should become a chain letter... send it to every man you no.....Good luck


  • CaliOkie silver member
    January 3

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    It is in those hot, sticky moments when we are what we are most of all: angels fallen and full of a thirst for life. That need to commingle and surge with the blood; to breathe in the flaming air and flair in the night and satisfy the hunger of the skin.

    Great work here. It's got me breathing flaming air. You use such wonderful, earthy imagery -- and even with the explicit nature, you celebrate the skin on skin contact sport of life. I found myself cheering at the end of this and being glad to be alive. You have filled this with the pull of the flesh and the wicked beauty that is unique to the damp and twisted sheet.

    Tremblingly good.

    Garrison


  • zochit2me gold member
    January 3

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    Damn right!!!

    could not have said it better myself...

    I love you in the raw

    ♥♥♥Becky♥♥♥


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    January 3

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    Awesome...I really liked the beginning and the ending the most...but every line is amazing

    great read!

    ~Catie


  • Pure Thought silver member
    January 3

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    MY LADY...

    ain't it great to be human?
    Hell-uv-a reply to my (......)
    Oh, I won't forget.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    January 3

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    Jesus Christ- now I'm exhausted by this stunning read,
    perhaps I should stay home tomorrow? I could claim to be sick? Damn-and here I have to go to bed shortly- CA King- all natural ventilated rubber latex mattress- perfect for those days and nights in the desert. Better than the tempurpedic, which holds the body heat in. God- body heat- now I AM in trouble!



    Len


  • Ademon
    January 3
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    .....simply stated, bravo.


  • charcoal
    January 3
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    wicked (:



  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    January 3
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    Hell yeah! nuff said too


  • DolceVito gold member
    January 3

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    Sounds like normal love-making to me, but amazing poetry.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 3

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    That is not a poem, that I shall be forgetting in a hurry, of that you can be totally sure!
    Fantastic stuff in content and execution, I now have to try to sleep!!!


    Love as always
    J


  • Polaja Greeters member
    January 3

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    this is such a brilliant poem - my favourite parts were the "hell yes" and "hell no" parts - fabulous!



    Polly


  • Haygood gold member
    January 3

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    sssmmmokin'!

    ummm...are there really womrn like that? Thanks for reminding us.


    • Pure Thought silver member
      January 3
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      Ummmm, yeh!

      There are women like that, all are to a degree. So, becareful.


  • nancy drew
    January 3
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    more applause!


  • autarky
    January 3

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    hahaha! this made me smile. my mother asked what was so funny and there was no way i could tell her!


  • notorious
    January 3
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    From poem to AN to you, you're perfect.


  • redbird
    January 3
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    lane, you're a badass. 'nuff said


    • Dalaney gold member
      January 3
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      me? pffft

      • David Houston
        January 5
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        You're Good and

        Can we go to Europe together; I want to take you to Belgium and show you many of my haunts, after we "play" in Paris, of course! And if you need a quick fix, well just give me a wink and I shall set you free for some time being! And try some of my riddles, Dalaney-- you won't regret it. Happy New Year....

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