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Absent Realisation

Me, the authority,
the one in the sky:
omnipotent creator
residing above clouds
under a burden of opulent affliction.

Everflowing prayers demanding
aid and attention,
forsaken tears streak from my face
irrigating floods of despair.

Transendancy indispensible
to retain your humanity;
to rob you of your own poverty would be
to rob you of your soul:
free will was the best gift
I ever gave,

why didn't i wrap it in ribbons?

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  • misticmoonlite gold member
    January 4

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    you certainly

    did describe as we envision the world should be, I
    agree, life needs to be made easier, but where could we start!! thank you for this entry, good luck...
    Sparks


  • Lanasaur
    January 4
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    very understandable

    great keep on penning and good luck in the contest