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Our Time by the Sea

The sun begins to subside over the horizon,
taking with it the last bit of energy of the day.
With the loss of the light,
you become my beacon there in front of me.


I hold you close,
loving this blissful time with you.

The sun is almost out of view,
it casts a light, a brilliant light on the water,
together with the ripples of the tide,
create a scene on breathtaking beauty.

There is nothing that can compare to you, and your golden light.
you shined, when there was darkness.

My darkness.

 

Ever shining.

 

How I love you so much,

What you and you soft sweet kisses mean to me,

is comparable to nothing else

how I love this time,

this time by the sea.

Our time.

 

Being alone with you,

sharing my heart with only you,

shows me what love is really like.

 

The colors of twilight,

shine across the sky,

they are the last.

 

 

Author notes

This is quite different from what i normally write.

January 3, 2009

This is my prompt
http://beautyintheordinary.deviantart.com/art/love-is-61217506

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Comments

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  • This is a very warm, sweet and beautiful portrayal of love. It's so romantic, and so full of imagery, it's almost like I'm in the poem, and I can see everything unfold in front of me. It's also the perfect length for this style of poem; not too long, and not too short.

    "There is nothing that can compare to you, and your golden light.
    you shined, when there was darkness.
    My darkness.

    Ever shining."

    That was most definitely what made my heart feel like it was being pulled, it was so beautiful.

    I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^

    Aeris Silverlight


  • Vertigo-
    January 10
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    Beautiful

  • I do like your poem. It's beautifully written. Good job. ^_^


  • Arrie
    January 4

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    I really enjoyed this one. You were right when you told me your writing syle was completely different than before...I like both styles, but whatever.

    Is it odd that this made me think of a song in the movie Sweeney Todd?

  • Awesome job, as usual.

  • oh... this was a beautiful love poem. a true tribute of devotion to cupid's ways. So heartfelt. another masterpiece. as always.

  • Holy hell! Wow this is such a magnificent piece. I love this so much this is such a beautiful write. Such happiness and heartfelt. This is very touching it makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. I like this so much. It's very romantic and it goes very well with the picture you have chosen. You have such a way with words my friend. This definitely made me smile because it's show me how much you care and love this person. It's very cute and a very enjoyable read. It made me feel so happy inside I am smiling while typing this. Thanks for entering this lovely poem in my contest. Best of luck in the contest. Much love and blessing

    RainbowRawr

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