Death By The Eyes
By: The Red Cat Jazz of Love
Oh God!
This disobedient angel
that was once loyal to you
wander this earth
and seems to have
a complete hold of me.
Oh God!
The thoughts tick
and they tock
but around this block
I just walked around this moment,
did I miss a glimpse of my
life something that needs
a permanent turn around.
Oh Jehovah !
Without you,
I’ am blind soundless unknown.
My sandwich isn’t delicious
without the blessings of your Grey
Poupon Mustard.
I’ am sitting here in the dark
staggering in my
old clogged up ways.
Oh Jehovah!
just give me the light
that I beg of you.
If only you could see me
hushing my tears
that have smeared my eye sight
on things and the emotions of hidious guilt
invade my cheeks boldly
and so disrespectfully but why?
How am I suppose to be okay without you?
I never will be.
Jehovah I don’t have the wind to fight
the demons if I don’t have your strength
I am just a worthless poet
utensil going to waste .
Just give me the light Jehovah
I beg of you.
Because without you I’ am so blind
without direction.
Oh God!
© Julia L. Clark Registration Number TXu-331-190, All rights reserved
Author notes
Death By The Eyes
If only you could understand
my soul when it comes to
my father you would see
another side of me that is untold.
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A contest entry
- I am just blind... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended January 10, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Death By The Eyes
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Wow this is a powerful prayer that reaches deep within. Your prayer/poem is beautiful. Thank you for sharing with me and best wishes in the contest.
Wow what you wrote is the truth really for us all. We all need God so we are not blind!!
Wishing You Many Blessings,
Kelle Marie
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thanks dear
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i understand a side i see as beautiful. you had wanting to repent
But seriously i loved this. If only others could understand u r who u r and no one can change the red cat jazz of love style. There's no duplicate.
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thanks hon
kisses
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Beautiful, Heartfelt Plea
This is a beautiful prayer reflecting how none of us would ever make it without God's Light of Truth. Very well done with only a few minor issues:
1) "wonder this earth" -- wonder/wander
2) "My sandwiches isn’t delicious" -- if you wish to keep sandwiches plural, then change isn't/aren't, other wise just remove the es from sandwiches
3) "that has smeared my sight" -- based on the previous line to this one, "has" should be "have."
Best wishes in the contest!
Luv in Christ, BonnieQ
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thank you i appreciate yu stopping by to be both credit and editor cool
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You're stronger than you think, thanks for all the love and honesty, God bless you sweet soul!
Peace, well penned!
Your friend, Timothy
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Very open and very honest touches by the soul of a poet..God must consider the points raised here ...amen..amen..amen..
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thanks mr khattar
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Powerful
A very passionate piece that
evokes much understanding.
we've all had to fight in the
saving of our faith
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thanks i love this poem mr howard thanks
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i love reading this side of you i always have it is like a total different person reading this here way of yours this is very very nice
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thanks you
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Exactly
Some of us have such a battle to face...and yes I see those sides too...being an intercessor,be blessed, this write is powerful and explains as such. -
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thanks you
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well..
very powerful words, very image-laden and yeah, it's different for you, but it is certainly..you!
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Yes, this is
a different side. Many of us walk an untold story of another life from within. Very interesting piece. Good luck to you in the contest.
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thanks dear
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The background is very pretty, but I think the actual poem could use some work. I think that if you are going to write about religion, you need to be a little less upfront about it, and make the religion a little more enticing. And, to be frank, the apostrophes after you I's are extremely distracting. Best of luck in the contest.
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very cute breathe and let the critic have it nicely )) talking to myself ))thank you for your opinion it is very well appreciated but how ever i don't have to base what I feel for my father the way you see it artist it is the way i see it you dig! your way is very pointless and doesn't matter are apply at all for this piece because you're not the writer of this piece i am. but let me worn you about something you may want to watch yourself when crossing my path. and thanks for the luck.
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You got that right ma do u no duplicates. If you change it, then would it be u?
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