VERSE
She's such a beautiful girl
Hidden by a saddened face
Always looking in the mirror
Always feeling out of place
She thinks she
Does not matter
Feels like the hurt
Will be an easier way
Theres no light inside her darkness
She thinks it's her tab to pay for
Believes that everythings her fault now
Feels like she cant take it anymore
Chorus:
And if she knew she hung my stars
Would it really even matter
If she knew how much I loved her
Could that ever make it better
And I will try
I will give it all I can
And love her righteously
I will take the time to understand
VERSE
She sits alone and cries
Her demons chase her day and night
She wants everything cleared
She just wants things to be right
Shes blind to see
All of her real emotions
Blocked behind a wall
So no-one else will know them
She runs from all of the right things
And holds on to what is wrong
How does she make it
How can one woman be so strong
pre-chorus:
And I know it's too much now
Can I just take all of her pain
I will gladly climb the mountains for her
And make it go away
Chorus:
And if she knew she hung my stars
Would it really even matter
If she knew how much I loved her
Could that ever make it better
All I can do is try, I will give it all I can
And love her righteously
I will be there, show her I care....
And maybe then she will understand
VERSE
She does'nt have a clue
Oh no she doesnt know
She is amazing, beautiful and loved
She has such a perfect soul
Her Smile could woo the angels down
Her strenght could hold the world together
Shes wonderful in every way
Im not sure I could ever know anyone better
Chorus outtro:
I see her strength
I see her longing for true love
It's not her fault
This pain is what she don't deserve
And she hangs the stars for me
And she is the goddess of my mind
Will that ever change a thing
Will I ever get to treat her right
I am still working on this but I think its at an quarter beat and the melody follows the guitar mostly.. I am far from finished but I would love opinions from other musicians or music lovers here....
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"she hung my stars" I love that line! I'm a muscian, and this would be..stunning (well in my mind) with orchestral insturments. It just has that feel. Nice!
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this is my absolute favorite. it's what you can call beautiful.
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i love it it shows a ton of emotion
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ur still quite the amazing writer i see
i really loved this one. So i hope you remember me... i finally got to come back to AP ... idk if your interested in talking to me anymore tho... but i will be here if you do want to talk.
~aly
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Wonderful!!!
this is a great song. I think that you put a lot of feeling into this poem. I like this a lot. I didnt notice how great your work was until now!!!Great Job
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wow
this poem holds alot of emotions that can be related in many ways! good job
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I absoutely loved it
This seems to be describing me but I don't know if you are
s 
s your a great writer hun
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Wow. It sounds a lot like me. Beautifully done hun
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wow that sound like me all the time running away from the ppl i love and running away from everthing that matters to me i love it
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awww........
wonderful again.
i like the idea of the selfhatred
balanced out by the truth in someone elses eyes
yay
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its good as usual keep it up
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